I enjoyed reading your commentary..: I enjoyed reading your commentary
Your advice is anything but rotten
Unfortunately for me, you see
Less than five minutes later, it was forgotten
I have problems with my memory
Did anything important happen in December?
I'm bad at remembering to forget
But good at forgetting to remember
By the way, I thought you might find this interesting. I was looking at your name. If you take your name and scramble the letters, you can come up with the following:
PAULETTA RUBY BOGGS = G, GOT BLUS? U BETA PRAY!
I am an ordained Metropolitan: I am an ordained Metropolitan Bishop, and I am here to share positive, uplifting thoughts and energy with honest, decent people
Thank you so much for: Thank you so much for commenting on this, and for understanding what I was trying to accomplish. This story came to me in a flurry last night, and I was up from three in the morning to almost six trying to put it together. I decided not to cite Biblical sources, as such notes might disrupt either the flow of the poem, or collide with its effect if the reader looked through any attached notes.
Your acceptance, as you know, gives the poem a full validation and I will keep it as is, without further adjustment or alteration. Thanks again for taking the time to read it and comment.
Your tightly packed epics are: Your tightly packed epics are always a joy to dive into. Brief and swift compared to a short story, this poem is so emotionally intense and historically intriguing that it could be a masterclass in compressed drama with a crucial, underlying message.
Some might believe that all captivating ideas for stories woven around Biblical events have been exhausted, but leave it to you to discover an opening for a hard-hitting, deeply satisfying scene; one that fits so gracefully into the timeline that it feels authentic, compelling, very much like the narration in the excellent story you pay homage to.
While some short stories take several paragraphs to construct a believable and engaging character, I felt like I knew the genial, multidimensional, Divinely blessed yet adorably shy Neaniskos in a few lines.
But it wasn't the youth or fleeting physical attributes of the character that brought him to life, it was his soft and beautiful aura displayed in small actions such as gently touching the centurion's arm. The unforced, natural calm of one character acted as a foil for the understandable indignation of the other and together, it worked.
A deeply emotional and richly allusive micro story worthy of its monumental setting.
When words paint a picture: When words paint a picture that jostles a memory, either true or perceived, tears well, or smiles are born, and both the author and reader find the purpose of those words, their meaning, and their worth. Thank you Starward for finding such worth in my words, I appreciate your time and visit Sir.
Thank : Tahnk you for reading. This is a work in progress I already made some changes. There is nothing better thatn coffee aroma for memories. Thank you for reading and commenting. Check out the few changes I made just now.
I am usually too verbose in: I am usually too verbose in many of my comments, but I must confess that this poem reaches me at such an elemental level that I do not have sufficient words to describe its impact upon me. I selected this poem at what I thought was a random browse; but I do not now believe the browse was random, I believe it was directed. I was led here, and I am mighty glad that I was.
If I may add..: If I may add something to your title 'Unmitigated Lies'
When it comes to Donald Trump
Not only are his lies unmitigated
As far as we know
I'm guessing 95% of them remain unlitigated.
I agree with you 100%..: I agree with you 100%. We certainly are living in a paranoid society. I am definitely paranoid, but in a different way. I believe that people are out to do good things for me.
If I were to..: If I were to take an egg
Take it right after it's hatched
And cook it, no joke
Oh, I could eat the yolk
Oh no! Don't you see how they matched?
You know what I'm referring to?
Is your head now in a whirl?
I'll be your 'Yolk, oh? Oh no! boy'
If you'll be my 'littlelennongurl'
Though your New Years..: Though your New Years wish is somewhat belated
It is very much appreciated.
The same to you and your family.
By the way, regarding your online name
Bob Marley said 'No woman, no cry'
You're 'wisdomscry'
Does that mean you believe 'No wisdom, no cry'?I must disagree. I feel the opposite.
Still enjoy reading your poems though.