This poem's language is: This poem's language is deployed in such a way as to sound ancient and archaic, instead of contemporary, and that is a real feat of writing right there. I applaud the way you demonstrate such poetic skill.
This all too brief poem: This all too brief poem sounds like a working script for a film that only a director, like Kubrick had been, could adequately handle.
There are times when I: There are times when I realise that I am the 'hobo on the tracks' that interrupts Poetry that I am attempting to keep from being from being aborted.
The blowing in/from the sand: The blowing in/from the sand always fascinated me. Sometimes it comes across as raspberry kisses of the seashore. This is a very moving piece.
How amazing that they walked: How amazing that they walked together, fellowshipped and supped together, in the Christophanic accounts of the Angel of the LORD
What struck me most is that: What struck me most is that the infamous rat race has also overtaken the online poetry world. And so we adapt and battle our way through
This one of the TIMELIEST: This one of the TIMELIEST Poems I have ever read here, and it presents a very shrewd and observant view of what I believe s a universal situation. Only a real Poet could have written this; no wannabe could measure up!
Reminds me of how I: Reminds me of how I periodically would attend a different denomination's worship service just to mix it up a bit, as the saying goes.
Ozymandias is definitely an: Ozymandias is definitely an influence however distant in the past it may be, so even if the reference or allusion though not direct cannot be denied completely. I was experimenting intentionally with the dithyramb which resembles a great part of my early writing voice. So it must be a blend of sorts of 'this and that.' Thanks so much for having picked that out