A truly poignant leaving: A truly poignant leaving behind.
Some things in life we are compelled to do,
the other alternative is less than favourable.
Most deeply felt.
I am enjoying the developing: I am enjoying the developing theme of a "Soldier's Diary" type narrative you got going on... It bridges the portals between worlds with a bleak, broad philosophical framework. Bravo!
Looked it up, you are: Looked it up, you are correct; Ecclesiastes 1:18:
“For in much wisdom is much grief: and he that increaseth knowledge increaseth sorrow.”
Get what you are saying!
I like that you went cosmic: I like that you went cosmic with it! There’s something in the poem’s motion that invites that kind of constellation‑mapping. For me, though, the piece was working more in the realm of tempo rather than trajectory. But I appreciate the Sagittarius drift which is interesting to see how the poem’s internal movement reads from the outside. Much enjoyed engagement
Sagittarius: An astrological acknowledgement, on the nuances of how to love properly... I pictured a sort of "connecting of cosmic dots," as it were, or perhaps a pulling of constellations... What's the one with the bow and arrow? Another extension of Orion? Bleh.