'Umbilical?' Our site: 'Umbilical?' Our site frontage has navel features, perhaps that's why this first came to mind. What a refreshing poetic output. And you are right, it doesn't necessarily need to rhyme except when attempting to keep to a part form. At which point it becomes a challenge that both restricts and frees our means of expression. For some people, some poems sound like Yoda and others like Shakespeare, while others still, a variety of exciting spontaneity. Thanks kindly for sharing the fruit of this particular inspiration.
Your meta-poem is your: Your meta-poem is your uniquely-you and epic wit on full display, and it's no surprise that it's a blast to read and ponder with inspiration from the great Bard of PostPoems.
From "chasms and pinnacles" to "ssoothing lotion" (with a nod to your lovable self) to "atmospheric word designs" you explored the possibilities of structure and capricious word gymnastics.
I adored every "whimsical" line. I want to say "physical" as a rhyme, but that's just a near rhyme, which was your point exactly.
Brilliant!
a curious thing:
Curiously, I always feel a greater bubbling of creativity come Autumn. I don’t know what it is, but it definitely starts stirring-up from October onward. I think as we spend more time indoors, we also spend more time, within ourselves.
the birds, my dog and me:
“I made it for the wildlife”
Often Nature has better plans than we do, if we give her a little room. I like the idea of sharing your garden with wild life. The whole earth should be that way.
I feel this one:
A lot of darkness in the world these days – that’s for sure. This brings to mind an image of “Starry Night”
I can feel this one. It’s a stand-up ovation from me… beautifully done.
A happy carefree existence?: A happy carefree existence?
I must offer some resistance
That possibility, don't explore
You write like that, you're sure to bore
Stick with misery and depression
A perfect form of self-expression
For those who are less than cheerful
So lose that smile, become more tearful
It is a privilege to read: It is a privilege to read your comments, and a great pleasure to read these verbal expressions of your perspective on all manner of subjects. Truly, you are one of postpoems' pillars.
An exquisitely formatted "I": An exquisitely formatted "I" poem. In the past it was drilled into us how the "I" in poetry was a non-negotiable taboo! Good going George
First, the typograhical: First, the typograhical layout of the lines attracts the eye, and by keeping it moving (a more radical motion than the usual lineation associated with Poetry), it gives the poem a visual sense of motion as well as the aural sense, which moves us through the development of the poem's entire content and point.
This poem reminds me of a period in my own life---the first of several---when I was separated (compulsorily) from my home, and all that I had known growing up, and the nights, even during the last part of summer when that separation began, felt cold indeed, although they really were not. I was able to return to my home, temporarily, for about six weeks, and the nights (which, at that time, had become chilly) seemed warmer than they should have been. I did not realize, until this year during its summer, why I was able to survive that separation. (That is a subject for a poem I intend to write.)
Your poem transcends the specifically personal to enter the realm of universal experience, and I suspect that every first year college student, every recruit in boot camp, and every newlywed who has just experienced the first bitter argument of the marriage can relate to the details in the poem, without knowing your personal circumstances. In this poem which, in my opinion, is the most brilliant of your poems that I have read, you strike that most difficult of balances---to take a personal emotion and write of it in a way that detaches from your personal circumstances and enters the universal, the timeless, and the instructive. This is quite an achievement; and, like the finest of the Classic Poets, you make it look easy without revealing how very difficult it is. I applaud your accomplishment in this poem, sir, and if I have been a bit verbose, it is only because the Poem inspires a gush of words in response to its total effect. This poem is a centerpiece to your total collection, and it is one of the centerpieces of the entire postpoems collection as well.
And this is indeed an: And this is indeed an achievement in communication and communion. An aspect, it can be said of living in harmony, even within the contxt of Poetry. Being adjacent and moving along parallel trajectories bears a trainload of goodness and as the mileage accumulate the dividends of this unions accrues. Perhaps the closest thing that serves as a clear analogy is the relationship between musicians and music lovers the world over which in observable and measurable manners bring this propinquity to live, to a beat and a rhythm which it shares with poetry.
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