Kinda brought me back to: Kinda brought me back to "whisper to a scream" in one way but this is its own song in so much more. The chains make for an unbroken melody. That perhaps alludes to another song from way back when. And yet this is its own voice and organic whole and brings the earth and the sky and everything in between, dark and light, hope and despair: very well proportioned!
Not as good as can be, my: Not as good as can be, my fault really. But there is always that one day that needs to be smited by today only, that's all we got. And yeah, "over ripe" is one of those beauties of vaguery in language that open up interpretation!
Excellent : Gain and flutter are guitar terms...do you yourself play?
The usage of “over ripe” could means several different things left open to interp.
I had fun exploring both contexts!
over-ripe meaning re-worked to the point of thnking to hard and dsiplaying an over worked piece...
i.e. “Stinking of the lamp” an expression coined by over-use of an oil lamp dring an all-nighter.
or over ripe poets, meaning poets in need of a shower and shave...
there are a few that tickle the brain, and keep it from smoothing over.
very well done.
W.
That is quite encompassing as: That is quite encompassing as language embraces the spaces where there may be no words or understanding, comfort or hope. There is beauty and refuge there as well. This is such a gem to the reading heart.
.: Thanks for the read, very much appreciated...
not much of a singer...actually quite shy in that regard....
Was aiming at somthing that can be embellished in true “crooner” form...
Ill definitely do a play through on soundcloud in future.
thanks for your interest !
W.
Breathless but not: Breathless but not thoughtless nor void of emotion - but full to overflowing. That is how parting should be. In the build up it felt like a parting that could most definitely end up sorrowful but the latter part and that shining last stanza has made the Reader both validated and empowered to walk in such light everyday. Thanks for sharing.
There is quite a strong beat: There is quite a strong beat and cadence as this poem is read out, quite a fascinating feature of many poems. Here one can be lost in the moment, and have that n't lobby/entrance feeling after leaving the cinema and a world that had only recently enveloped all of yourself. Can't wait to experience it on Soundcloud!
Thanks beatnik. I am glad you: Thanks beatnik. I am glad you aired that thought. The question is probably the most important mechanism of thinking, as far as human thought life is concerned. I could be wrong there, but it is compelling and does transcend language which can be very offputting for many of us who are not fans of the thought-gym.
F.
Shadow: the long shadow is real, my friend.
They must have been special to haunt you in this manner..
A beautiful torture.
The gravity is defined by the permanence of the loss.
W.
Petrichor :
The smell you are describing is petrichor...Its unmistakabl.
A pleasant smell that frequently accompanies the first rain after a long period of warm, dry weather.
When that rain hits the asphalt....pure rush of nostalgia.
Its Bliss.
Thanks for the read
love_light_dmt: Having ridden my bike today, the last lap it was raining on the asphalt. Was already thinking of my favorite scent prior, that plus passing folks mowing their terf so sweet smells like wheatgrass.
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