licence to keel

 

 

 

 

 

~ imPRESSions ~

Author's Notes/Comments: 

2/50 orchlenge

Beatnik1979's picture

Excellent

Gain and flutter are guitar terms...do you yourself play?

The usage of “over ripe”  could means several different things left open to interp.

I had fun exploring both contexts!

over-ripe meaning re-worked to the point of thnking to hard and dsiplaying an over worked piece...

i.e. “Stinking of the lamp”  an expression coined by over-use of an oil lamp dring an all-nighter.

or over ripe poets, meaning poets in need of a shower and shave...

there are a few that tickle the brain, and keep it from smoothing over.

very well done.

 

W.

 

redbrick's picture

Not as good as can be, my

Not as good as can be, my fault really. But there is always that one day that needs to be smited by today only, that's all we got. And yeah, "over ripe" is one of those beauties of vaguery in language that open up interpretation!


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S74RW4RD's picture

Beautiful poem, and that

Beautiful poem, and that second quatrain will, I am sure, come back to me more than once when I enter that final twilight before homegoing.


Starward

redbrick's picture

That is quite a connection to

That is quite a connection to have been made, for me it is like the effect of those famous lines:

When You Are Old

 

 

When you are old and grey and full of sleep,
And nodding by the fire, take down this book,
And slowly read, and dream of the soft look
Your eyes had once, and of their shadows deep;
 
How many loved your moments of glad grace,
And loved your beauty with love false or true,
But one man loved the pilgrim soul in you,
And loved the sorrows of your changing face;
 
And bending down beside the glowing bars,
Murmur, a little sadly, how Love fled
And paced upon the mountains overhead

And hid his face amid a crowd of stars.

 

 


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patriciajj's picture

This hypnotic and hauntingly

This hypnotic and hauntingly eloquent spill of words illustrates time's passage, then lands on a note that I interpret as rebirth or the timelessness of the written word.

 

The variety and deep insight of your collection is astounding.

 
redbrick's picture

Thanks Patricia. It's quite

Thanks Patricia. It's quite satisfying to get feedback about this being about time's passage which is one of several ideas that this poem carries with it. Also loving the thought or rebirth and timelessness of the written word. That is fantastic!  /Rik.


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