The shift from pronouns makes: The shift from pronouns makes for an interesting riddle: who's who? I like how the 'you' seems to address both the narrator and audience simultaneously.
Yes, I see precisely what you: Yes, I see precisely what you mean, the message we sense in the final stanza there especially draws that contrast; whereas mine may be patriarchal, yours is much more positive.
Thank You: Hi there, and thank you so very much for taking the time to read my poem and I deeply appreciate it and I hope that you're having a lovely day! :)
To An Old Man Whose Doctors Believe That His Death Is Imminent: "But about that day or hour no one knows, not even the angels in heaven, nor the Son, but only the Father" -- Matthew 24:36: