Thank you. The Tanka form is: Thank you. The Tanka form is severe in its demands, but restrictions are not neccesarily impediments. I am very glad that you commented on this poem in particular. Thank you very much.
It was a very ambitious idea: It was a very ambitious idea to condense so much drama into this restraining form, but you managed it with impacting deftness. Your mention of poetry gives it refinement, the intimate image gives it power and the shattering development turns it into a poignant work of art. Excellent!
Spontaneous prayers seem to: Spontaneous prayers seem to be a direct route to the Heart of The Most High. Humility, empathy and sincerely radiate in this micro tower, making it a spiritual epic. Thank you for being a scribe to the Infinite, so whoever needs this will be blessed.
With your customary poetic: With your customary poetic skill, you depict a very bleak prospect indeed; and one which, I suspect, happens far too often and far too extensively. I also think that most people are unable to articulate it---but this poem definitely provides expression of it, and that will help others who are unable to make such an expression.
you have NEVER studied: you have NEVER studied metaphysics... lol... but Sisyphus... now there's a beautiful tragic mythical figure... of that, we can agree.
Thank you Stephen, I'm not: Thank you Stephen, I'm not really sure about this one, something isn't working but I can't quite put my finger on what it is.