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The Everyday Battle I don't need to be reminded
that its all meaningless
I feel the slow hours tick by
from my already too short life
Another breath
Another bottle
Another wasted day gone
Fill my lungs with cancer
And why?
I don't die faster
Fill my gut with liquor
The pain doesn't leave
Why try when there is no end
I refuse to race without finish
"Everything is meaningless, says the teacher"
Listless at my own apathy
I don't care to care
I can't
Because it doesn't matter
Why live for life's sake?
Why die to end it?
All is without purpose
"Everything is meaningless, says the teacher."
Nicely written, good structure.
I enjoyed this one a lot. I think one sentance kind of doesn't fit in the last stanza "What hope is there for the waking dead?" Just my two cents.
Considerations
You were right, it sounds much better without the aforementioned line. I have edited it, and thanks for your input. ~Seraphim
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I'm glad that you like it, and I appreciate the tip. I'll think on it, get a little more feedback, and will consider reviewing it. Thank you for reading my work.
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