This is another excellent: This is another excellent summary of the Nativity events. I would question, however, your statement that "It wasn;t well organized." That directly contradicts the last line of the preceding stanza, and also implies a criticism of God's exact plan for accomplishing all this.
I am sorry for the glitch that opened a second comment.: I am sorry for the glitch that opened a second comment. Please delete. I did not mean to clutter up this poem's comment section.
I wanted to read this: I wanted to read this captivating, sly and jolting statement a few times because your strategy is very effective. The message is underscored by your brilliant choice of structure and voice; the sparse lines speak with an ominous, serpentine perception and coil around our consciousness in the blink of an eye. A shrewd and farsighted wake-up call. Love it!
A vivid and refined analogy: A vivid and refined analogy that illustrates the desirability of what is simple and natural over human definitions of opulence. Another brilliant perspective.
While the poem definitely: While the poem definitely presents a cautiomary tale, it should be posted, perhaps, well after the holiday and not this close to the holiday's arrival.
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