Poetry is quite a significant: Poetry is quite a significant Burning Bush to more than I am able to recognise, so here I plant a moment's salute to such a validation. We can but be true to the calling of yon Muse.
That is an ongoing personal: That is an ongoing personal project to which I am much obligated to but have not been able to fulfill in force as yet. But we shall get there, opportunity permitting. Thank you for sharing.
From dance to music to: From dance to music to poetry, these are connections to cherish and explore further on. This much appreciated feedback brings to mind the capacity of lines of verse to transform into a journey of language and beyond should we so dispose ourselves. Thank you most kindly.
I like your perspective quite: I like your perspective quite a bit. Genesis, John's Gospel and the anonymous Epistle to the Hebrews all declare that the Cosmos was created by the Word of God.
Thank you. As a kid, I used: Thank you. As a kid, I used to dream of writing science fiction, but was intimidated by length . . . even the length of a short story. I just couldn't sustain it. I think that was my inclination to Poetry making an early appearance before I even realized what it was. Maybe this poem was beginning to form even then (lol). Thanks again for the comment.
Wow! You did it! By shrewdly: Wow! You did it! By shrewdly skipping to the aftermath, and with an accomplished agility that lives up to the form, you fit an epic into a capsule.
Many great writers have created protracted stories around this dystopian theme, but all you had to do was take an applause-worthy snippet of conversation and turn it, gracefully, into a thriller. I do love the suggestion of a great chasm, perhaps ideological or cultural, but certainly of distance, between the worlds that have converged.
Emphasizing "the" at the end spoke volumes as well.
A stunning maneuver. Take a bow, fine Poet!
Actually enlightenment is: Actually enlightenment is getting rid of all the chatter however you want to do that. It's always a pleasure to see where your imagination takes you. Huge respect.
You mention Buddy Ebsen loved..: You mentioned Buddy Ebsen loved to portray Jed Clampett. Since he took the job of acting seriously, he would really want to get into the character he was portraying. He needed to be Jed Clampett. In order to achieve that he would need to eat what Jed Clampett would. Here are the 20 dishes Buddy Ebsen ate during the run of The Beverly Hillbillies. You may turn your nose up at them, but he did live to 95. Maybe this diet had something to do with it?
https://www.metv.com/quiz/the-meals-of-the-beverly-hillbillies-ranked-in-order-of-edibility
If enlightenment in this: If enlightenment in this context holds absent-mindedness, then perhaps it is that. Regardless, I am always happy to hear you enjoyed the craft. Thank you Pat.
I like your choreography of: I like your choreography of several processes, in this poem, and the lack of punctuation is very strategically shrewd, as it gives the poem (which we must read it from margin to margin, horizontally, in real time) the artistic sense that everything is going on at once, and not in a progression from first to last, left to right, or top to bottom. To do so in such a small space, with such few words, is an awesome command of language and of poetic structure.
Slow-brewing expressions are: Slow-brewing expressions are often the best. Once this was ready, you served it with the demolishing wit every pompous blowhard deserves. A delight to comment on.
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