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Teytonon commented on: Penn in play? Play Penn by Teytonon 3 years 16 weeks ago
I see you’re a perfectionist like me.: I see you're a perfectionist like me. You're absolutely right. The line has been changed. Thanks for pointing it out to me!  
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Starward commented on: Penn in play? Play Penn by Teytonon 3 years 16 weeks ago
This is good, and I agree,: This is good, and I agree, but I would suggest an adjustment to the eighth line.  The pronoun, "he," doubles back to the nearest proper noun, which is Fetterman; with the implication (which stumbled me at first) that Fetterman would accuse the Democrats, his own party, of cheating.  If Fetterman wins, and an accusation of cheating is raised, it will be Oz or Trump (who is really the Wizard of Oz, in this case, as the man behind the screen pulling the control levers) who will raise that accusation.  Just replace "he'll" with "Oz'll" and the line will read more accurately and smoothy.   Otherwise, this is an excellent political poem.
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georgeschaefer commented on: FARTING AT A PARTY by georgeschaefer 3 years 16 weeks ago
Farting is a quintessential: Farting is a quintessential element of human life--or some such shit as that.
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georgeschaefer commented on: THE ALPHABET OF STARS by georgeschaefer 3 years 16 weeks ago
thank you for the kind words: thank you for the kind words
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georgeschaefer commented on: THE ALPHABET OF STARS by georgeschaefer 3 years 16 weeks ago
I'll thake any comparison to: I'll thake any comparison to Van Gogh.  thanks for reading and commenting
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georgeschaefer commented on: THE ALPHABET OF STARS by georgeschaefer 3 years 16 weeks ago
Each person has their own: Each person has their own point of view.  You should be expressing yourself in your poetry.  Pundits and scholars be damned, first person narrative can really drive home that point.
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crypticbard commented on: FARTING AT A PARTY by georgeschaefer 3 years 16 weeks ago
The least common denominator: The least common denominator and a levelling of the playing field whilst sharing in a commonality whilst killing social taboo.
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crypticbard commented on: Running in the rain by Pungus 3 years 16 weeks ago
It would seem that an once of: It would seem that an once of care is almost always worth several pounds of cure. Prevention of disaster allows room for more fun!
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Teytonon commented on: Flotsam & jetsam, now sugar-free by Teytonon 3 years 16 weeks ago
Take all the tributaries you need: Take all the tributaries you need. I was about to order more anyway. Thanks for your comment!
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crypticbard commented on: minding your portals by redbrick 3 years 16 weeks ago
Thanks most kindly, dear: Thanks most kindly, dear Patricia. If lines could still be made to dance and come ablaze then there is still some writing left to be done.
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patriciajj commented on: Heaven is a Moment by patriciajj 3 years 16 weeks ago
Thank you for stopping by and: Thank you for stopping by and leaving such a ravishing and expansive contemplation on my theme. Always an honor when you stop by.
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Starward commented on: + 27.225 MHz: Poem To A Young Man Named Stephen, On Psalm 35 by S74rw4rd-13d 3 years 16 weeks ago
Thank you so very much.: Thank you so very much.
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patriciajj commented on: + 27.225 MHz: Poem To A Young Man Named Stephen, On Psalm 35 by S74rw4rd-13d 3 years 16 weeks ago
A luminous capsule of faith: A luminous capsule of faith and hope. You make a difference! 
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patriciajj commented on: minding your portals by redbrick 3 years 16 weeks ago
You certainly have a portal: You certainly have a portal to the Sublime—four dancing, blazing, miraculous lines. My greatest respect!  
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crypticbard commented on: sacrifice by orangejumpsuit 3 years 16 weeks ago
Sacrifices like this can: Sacrifices like this can offer no afterglow.
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