This poem is splendidly: This poem is splendidly philosophical or psychological or existential (I am sure each reader will see one or more of these aspects), all three at once, and it presents a paradox that I have never seen stated before: that the shorter the cut, the deeper the wound. To me, reading this for the first time this morning, your statement and explication of this paradoxical situation is short of brilliant. Though the subject is tragic (sometimes bordering on comic when one realizes the stupidity of always taking the short cut to the deep wound), your presentation of it is elegant, empathetic, and very, very convincing. This poem is not talking about something fictive---like perpetual motion machines, or little green aliens from Alpha Centauri; this poem is telling us of the very human condition into which so many of us wake, and from which so many of us retreat into fiftul and disturbed sleep. You have posted a poem that is excellent in all of its aspects.
Thar first line, about the: Thar first line, about the streets being filled with broken dreams and cliches is so very poetic that it constritutes a poem of its own!
A strikingly insightful and: A strikingly insightful and brilliantly navigated journey through those exasperating psychological landscapes where even shortcuts are perilous. I get this!
Superb and highly identifiable.
I have been reading Poetry: I have been reading Poetry for fifty years, as of this past April. And although I am at a loss to know what the name of your writing style is, or how it should be defined, I am sure, as sure as I have ever been about any poetry I have read in this half century, that I like your poetry very, very much.
thank you: thank you
i appreciate you're kind words i couldn't figure out the password since i did this when i was 16 i still write to this day and find a great release in getting the words out but in 2015 i lost my dad and b4 he died i wrote him a poem and he heard it and i have forgotten what an escape and how true poetry is because you know trama and heart break tend to change us but thanks so much for looking and liking the poem it means the world to me... also im coming to check out your poems now i fianlly got back in
thank you: i appreciate you're kind words i couldn't figure out the password since i did this when i was 16 i still write to this day and find a great release in getting the words out but in 2015 i lost my dad and b4 he died i wrote him a poem and he heard it and i have forgotten what an escape and how true poetry is because you know trama and heart break tend to change us but thanks so much for looking and liking the poem it means the world to me
I always loved your micro: I always loved your micro epics that incorporate saavy humor, satirical style and some real chills as well. What could be more indulgent and delightful? It certainly brings back great memories of old horror classics that I couldn't get enough of back in the day.
With your whimsical descriptive powers and intriguing narration, you conjured up some shock—and some oddly satisfying laughs. The speaker's sardonic attitude, the speaker's situation itself, the experimenter's nonchalant attitude towards his errors, the dystopian project and the mystery of who was being addressed added several layers of enjoyment to this rich, dark and thrilling tale.
You did it again! Fantastic!
I don’t understand…: I don't understand either of you two.
Do you know what I was trying to do here?
I took the names 'Donald Trump' and 'Ron Desantis' and from the 22 letters that make up their names, came up with what I did. I explained it already. Besides Trump and DeSantis, is there anyone else you would support? Choose someone who's not a stupid moron. Joe Biden's not a stupid moron, but you won't choose him. In the meantime...
STEPHEN, FREE-SPIRITED_WOLF = HE'S PRESIDENT. O F! E W, RIT? EL! P? F!
Excellent! Seems to me like: Excellent! Seems to me like the last few of your poems that I have read have followed this format---three triplets, or three squared, for a total of nine lines in each poem. Is this a significant detail for you, and may I ask what that significance means?
Your high-voltage, rap-style: Your high-voltage, rap-style expression is certainly a relatable journey for me. I felt like you were writing about an old friend, my best friend for a while, until it became my worst enemy, and I finally felt, as you did, that "I deserve to be the me that I recognize". Well said!
With your resolve, insight and intelligence, I'm sure you'll find the road to freedom.
Enjoyed your very moving, artistic and honest creation.
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