I am sorry for the glitch that opened a second comment.: I am sorry for the glitch that opened a second comment. Please delete. I did not mean to clutter up this poem's comment section.
I wanted to read this: I wanted to read this captivating, sly and jolting statement a few times because your strategy is very effective. The message is underscored by your brilliant choice of structure and voice; the sparse lines speak with an ominous, serpentine perception and coil around our consciousness in the blink of an eye. A shrewd and farsighted wake-up call. Love it!
A vivid and refined analogy: A vivid and refined analogy that illustrates the desirability of what is simple and natural over human definitions of opulence. Another brilliant perspective.
While the poem definitely: While the poem definitely presents a cautiomary tale, it should be posted, perhaps, well after the holiday and not this close to the holiday's arrival.
The inspiration you draw from: The inspiration you draw from Nguyen De is like a transporting breeze, and this is no exception; the vibrant winds resulted in excellence in purity, emotional impact and execution.
It's lines like these that glisten and hum long after the last line is read:
". . . So, in my junior high school
naivete, I concluded that if I could imagine bruises, scrapes, and
damage schoolbooks into reality, I should also be able to
imagine my own, private, and sheltering shrine to the Glory of Christ."
Quiet magnificence.
Your expression whispers and: Your expression whispers and haunts and shatters. A few delicate, relatable lines that pinpoint the experience take on so much power in your talented hands that I'm silenced. And that's art.
"sometimes its as simple as : "sometimes its as simple as remembering to reach out with a prayer
and breathe in the answer"
The casual splendor, the unflinching truth, the shimmering wit, the realness of your expression has almost moved me to tears.
Every line says: "I know!"
Every word says: "hope"
A perfect pocket dial with a profound message that makes us all your friend.