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You have described with: You have described with intense precision one of the seasons of my life---a time that began in Autumn, 1980, and lasted for a little over three years.  My heart goes out to anyone who has experienced something like this, be it for hours or for years.

GETTING TIRESOME NOW: GETTING TIRESOME NOW SNAKE YOU OBVIOUSLY DON'T WANT TO DEAL SHOULD I HAND THINGS TO MR P??? I'M RATHER BUSY DELAYED FIRING TOO SO I COULD MEET YOU

MR P IIUITO: MR P IIUITO

A comment from lyrycsyntyme: A comment from lyrycsyntyme is a very good reason to read the poem so commented on, and this poem is magnificent.  I really enjoy the way you deployed words.  One thing stumbled my eye was the change of second person address from "you" to "thee" and then back; and the change from second to third person address.  Is the person in the first line the same as in the seventh line?  (I am an old man, and I do not deny the possibility of my bad mis-reading of any given poem.)  Still, despite these points (which may be more on my reading than on the poem), this poem is still beautifully presented.  One aspect that caught my eye as an excellent verbal strategy was the dwindling length of the lines in the last five lines, and no punctuation following the last word---which, in this case, is an advantage, because it opens the field of possibility and leaves all sorts of questions unanswered, enhancing the sense of mystery that accompany such experiences.  I really, really like this poem; it has my applause!

broughts tears to my eyes as: broughts tears to my eyes as it made me think of my late father. Blessings to you for this wonderful, wonderful piece you have shared

The poem sounds like a: The poem sounds like a whispered conversation---and the fourth and fifth lines, along with the last, are comforting and reassuring.  Although brief, the poem is emotionally powerful.