In the Quiet

As the wind drifts by
So too does my love drift on
Like an ocean breeze waning back and forth
Or the sunsets kisses slowly saying goodbye

 

Love and it's infinite wisdom
Never ending in troubles and woes
But as soon as Fate takes hope away
Somehow it rekindles a spark again

 

As midnight says hello
And the owl yawns from slumber
Thoughts of who we are and what we've been
Creep up like winters silence

 

Dare we tread on icy ground?
And take risk in finding plunder?
Or are we satisfied to watch night and morning's love?

 

We among the wild, seem sorely out of place
For our hands and feet they bind us
To a creator who gives and takes away

 

The turning of tides find us
And washes our sins away
By the blood of someone's love for us
And who will surely come again

 

So as the days and nights fade in
And the world feels chagrin
We who keep watch of light
Will soon bring the beginning

 

So don't forget amongst the morn
That you hold thy lamp
Don't forget to light the world
When darkness is at hand

Author's Notes/Comments: 

I'd really love any critique for this. This is for my mother's birthday that I will be putting in the middle of a collage I'm making. Any suggestions are welcome :)

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ashes_theartofburning's picture

Have you already made this?

This was a beautiful, and uplifiting piece! I agree with Ss on that one. ^.- You have such a nimble hand when your write..It's as if, when I read your words, I can see the soft strokes from your pen that you put into this, and I can smell the crisp sheets you wrote upon..enchanting..I loved it! You have awesome poems! I do hope you keep us enthralled with more!<3


"We are, Each of us angels with only one wing, and we can only fly by embracing one another." -Luciano De Crescenzo

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Your comment made me so happy

Your comment made me so happy :').

The sad part is...I haven't given it to her yet...xD I need to get down to the craft store to finish it.

Beavis's picture

;-)

I think it's beautiful!

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D'awwww! Thank you :3 ~Soul

D'awwww! Thank you :3

~Soul

SSmoothie's picture

This is beautiful,

This is beautiful, romantically written, inspiring and uplifting, it has all the elements of life fear and anticipation and a gentle heartening closure! Your mother is one lucky woman! Excellent write what there is to Improve? I couldn't possibly tell, congrats and happy birthday to your mother. Cheers SS


Don't let any one shake your dream stars from your eyes, lest your soul Come away with them! -SS    

"Well, it's love, but not as we know it."

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Omgoodness!! You made my

Omgoodness!! You made my heart jump for joy!! Thank you so much I appreciate such lovely words from a lovely person :)

Much love!

~Soul