Here is a quiet revelation,: Here is a quiet revelation, balancing between cosmic vastness and personal introspection, making the reader experience an intimate meditation on existence, freedom, and the fleeting nature of earthly concerns when compared to the boundless universe. A truly gratifying read
...hypnotic, rhythmic:
...hypnotic, rhythmic quality—pulling the reader into a world where thoughts, sensory experiences, and existential musings merging; like Jack-O-Lantern and Pinocchio intersecting. The contrasts between physical setting and abstract philosophy enhance its complexity, making this poem feel layered with meaning.
One vast constellation- now: One vast constellation- now here is a cosmic vision that could only be fashioned by One that is omniscient, omnipresent and omnipotent in the same essence and Being. Divinely excellent.
...a lamb, blood drenched,: ...a lamb, blood drenched, slain -resurrected over a lion, rampant, almighty... one deserved to break the Seals the other a metaphor of righteous zeal, two sides of the one coin.
I am so overwhelmed with: I am so overwhelmed with gratitude right now, gratitude not just on the horizontal plane of internet communication, but also on the vertical plane of twenty plus years on this site.
I have never had a comment quite so superlative, and after reading yours, I feel that I have reached the point of which I first dreamed starting Monday, October 13th, 1975, when, as a senior in high school, I set aside my science fiction ambitions and turned to Poetry. In June, I will have three procedures done; and, because of my other health issues, they have to be performed withi the hospital itself. The outcomes may not be good. The immediate outcomes could be dangerous to me. This comment not only validates the poem, but strengthens me, as akin to a prayer, for June's difficulties.
Your feedback truly means a: Your feedback truly means a lot. It is always very encouraging to see comments like this, and reminds me this is one of the reasons I write lyrics. Thank you for reading my work.
These words are powerful.: These words are powerful. They don’t just express pain—they give it shape, meaning, voice. It takes courage to put raw emotions into poetry like this, to take that weight and craft it into something that speaks brings life and feeling outside of ourselves and into other's.
Grief is heavy, but you: Grief is heavy, but you remind us that love doesn’t fade—it lingers in memories, in moments, in the quiet spaces we carry forward. The way you balance sorrow with hope is powerful; it gives weight to loss but refuses to let it diminish the connection that remains.