That's a whole lifetime there: That's a whole lifetime there spent of sleeping and eating, hair cutting and hair lengthening, of gaining and losing of weight. And all the while Time ticks and the hours become days and months and years, and the tocking continues. It felt like love was hidden both in the shutting in and of being shut out. So real and so impressing.
I'm so moved by your: I'm so moved by your exquisite words of appreciation and encouragement that I simply don't know how to thank you. Love, joy, life and hugss to you as well.
God watches now because He: God watches now because He will not take away the gift of Free Will that He bestowed upon us. But watching does not imply passive response. He will respond in His timing, not ours; and that response will be, for some, rather rough.
No one can doubt the power of: No one can doubt the power of your imagery. I have, in decades past, read many horror tales in prose---many of them far too verbose---that do not handle this same theme near as successfully as you have in those poems of yours that I have read tonight,
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The two Poets who have: The two Poets who have commented on this prior to me have completely expressed what I would have said anyhow, and they have expressed it better than I could.
I agree, with just one: I agree, with just one reservation, that this poem should not be further edited, because it reads so well as it is. The one alteration I would suggest is to change "round 2" to "round two." And those last ten or so lines are very, very powerful.
This poem has a very playful: This poem has a very playful tone to it, like the scherzo in a symphony. This is how I imagine your actual conversational voice to be.