Forgive me for making a: I just want to reiterate how well you have handled the material in such a brief space, and I sure do look forward to more of this from you.
There is that element of loss: There is that element of loss and also the element of relationship. It can be read with both involved as such as its primary theme but it is also hoped that it lends itself to other meanings. Many things for your generous read and response.
While I cannot speak of the: While I cannot speak of the emotion in the poem, as that seems, to me, to be rather private (and I want to respect that), I applaud the triplet stanzas and the rhyme scheme within them.
Thank you kindly Starward.: Thank you kindly Starward. Turns of phrases are quite exciting and bring the mind to thoughts and places it otherwise won't, many poems and poets over millennia have pushed and stretched language to its extreme limits and thus breaking through much like word coinage when there aren't other conventional ways of saying what has to be said.
remember the old typewriters: remember the old typewriters when you could rub your finger over the black dot and make it a black smudge? I'm sure we'll eventually be able to do that on Word if they haven't already devised such technology.
Very valid point :) I do try: Very valid point :) I do try to make a concerted effort to create writing that's fairly relatable to a lot of people, kinda universal themes that you can apply to your own life. But you're right, I definitely have a couple very personal, specific memories in mind which is fueling the narrative. Emotion is unavoidably polarizing (and thus flawed at times) but also so necessary to have critical moments that go by become memorable and valuable to you.
So I focus on a balance between the two forces; The emotive versus the relatable. Great comment tho, really got my brain turning :) take care