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Starward commented on: It's You by Blackspeare 1 year 43 weeks* ago* A comment from lyrycsyntyme: A comment from lyrycsyntyme is a very good reason to read the poem so commented on, and this poem is magnificent. I really enjoy the way you deployed words. One thing stumbled my eye was the change of second person address from "you" to "thee" and then back; and the change from second to third person address. Is the person in the first line the same as in the seventh line? (I am an old man, and I do not deny the possibility of my bad mis-reading of any given poem.) Still, despite these points (which may be more on my reading than on the poem), this poem is still beautifully presented. One aspect that caught my eye as an excellent verbal strategy was the dwindling length of the lines in the last five lines, and no punctuation following the last word---which, in this case, is an advantage, because it opens the field of possibility and leaves all sorts of questions unanswered, enhancing the sense of mystery that accompany such experiences. I really, really like this poem; it has my applause! [ go to comment ]
lyrycsyntyme commented on: It's You by Blackspeare 1 year 44 weeks* ago* I really love this line pair: "I ascertained that without thee I’m at sea If I don’t attain thee I’ll be missed for ages" It really encapsulates the state of mind of a devastating heartbreak, and it's lost time. Fantastic, on the whole. I didn't anticipate it all being a dream. Hopefully one that is to become reality for you ; ) [ go to comment ]
ramonathompsont commented on: UNTIL WE MEET AGAIN by joy 1 year 44 weeks* ago* broughts tears to my eyes as: broughts tears to my eyes as it made me think of my late father. Blessings to you for this wonderful, wonderful piece you have shared [ go to comment ]
DaztheDruid commented on: HEY CIA by DaztheDruid 1 year 44 weeks* ago* AIDY 72 HOURS 44 MILES WNW: AIDY 72 HOURS 44 MILES WNW OF LAST LOCATION. CHECK THE COFFEE SHOPS 3.15PM. HAPPY SOME HAVE SEEN S3NSE. POLYGRAPH NO PROBLEM. DON'T BOOK ANYTHING PAY CASH FOR EVERYTHING WRAP YOUR CIA PHONES IN TIN FOIL. I GOT TO SEE THE SNAKE FIRST GIVE THEM THE DEMANDS, AND OF COURSE THERE'S A WAR RAGING WITH AI TO BOOT. SO POSSIBILITIES OF BEING LATE [ go to comment ]
Starward commented on: commit to pen by redbrick 1 year 44 weeks* ago* The poem sounds like a: The poem sounds like a whispered conversation---and the fourth and fifth lines, along with the last, are comforting and reassuring. Although brief, the poem is emotionally powerful. [ go to comment ]
mysweetdakini commented on: Bosphorus Touch by shewhodwellsint... 1 year 44 weeks* ago* Grateful for your Generosity:): Thanks for visiting Starward_()_ [ go to comment ]
lyrycsyntyme commented on: commit to pen by redbrick 1 year 44 weeks* ago* Happy New Year to you, as: Happy New Year to you, as well. Thank you : ) [ go to comment ]
lyrycsyntyme commented on: a robot wrote this, it wasn't really me by Jesster 1 year 44 weeks* ago* Nothing is obsolete that: Nothing is obsolete that speaks the exhalations of your eyes. What are words without soul? [ go to comment ]
lyrycsyntyme commented on: The Fingers by LornaRJ 1 year 44 weeks* ago* "Unwrap our fingers": A most love-centric request. [ go to comment ]
lyrycsyntyme commented on: She's In Love by DaveBrowder 1 year 44 weeks* ago* Happy to come across some new: Happy to come across some new lyrics from you. Really like this one about obsession and it's dangers to the one being obsessed over. Have you recorded any new material recently? [ go to comment ]
lyrycsyntyme commented on: Bring back Newt by Teytonon 1 year 44 weeks* ago* Hmmm. If we had a functional: Hmmm. If we had a functional democracy, these kind of "fights" to determine the speaker of the House would be the minimum standard, rather than a once in a 100 year event that half the population mocks, because it's not their party of choice. Lockstep agreement should trouble us, not the reverse. At least as far as I can see. But don't color me too impressed by just a couple of firecrackers going off on the 4th of July. [ go to comment ]
lyrycsyntyme commented on: Melodious vibrations by FLboy555 1 year 44 weeks* ago* 5 lines: that could fight an incredible battle to be the most memorable, and yet none standing in the way of each other when working with in the poem - working together. [ go to comment ]
lyrycsyntyme commented on: FRIDAY NIGHT AT THE CHESTNUT by georgeschaefer 1 year 44 weeks* ago* Well told, George..I mean: Well told, George..I mean Great Poet. Well told. [ go to comment ]
Starward commented on: Bosphorus Touch by shewhodwellsint... 1 year 44 weeks* ago* This reminds me very much of: This reminds me very much of some of the Frency symbolists' poetry. The way you deploy the words is very artistic. [ go to comment ]
Junip3rb3rry commented on: piddlepaddle by Junip3rb3rry 1 year 44 weeks* ago* Love fiddlefaddle popcorn!: Love fiddlefaddle popcorn! [ go to comment ]