The allusive last line is: The allusive last line is very coy. Miletus reminds me of the Apostle Saint Paul's farewell to the Ephesias elders. Is that the gist of the allusion, or am I missing the boat here?
I like your evolving style in: I like your evolving style in this poem. The lingering uncertainty is part of the total evocative power of the poem, and the coy glimpses of a world like ours, but apparently not entirely like ours, keeps the interest mounting.
I love the density of: I love the density of allusion in this poem. That final line sends me right back to Vergil, The Aeneid, VI, the golden bough---and all it represents in that epic poem.
Powerful imagery: This poem paints such great images, like I can see myself there, smell the smoke, the tentativity... makes me want to believe in magic!
K
the right words: Nations have long
memories.
Peace is a big word
But so is starvation.
Two great lines! You have a way of finding the right words. Concise, but unforgettable.
K
Myopic Vision: .
All connected, humans surviving. Indoor farming can feed communities. Cities farm vacant lots. Apartment farm? With inflation about to double, maybe! :D
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As eco-systems fail (300,000 +Haitians died in 2010) migration will increase - see Haitians in sail boat rescue off Florida. Dominican Republic built wall and armed guards seal off 1/2 of Hispanola. It begins.
~A~
Powerful Write: Thought unspoken, almost hiddden. Nice lie cover, reader allowed to know there is a hidden truth. Tell-all irony. Well constructed. .
Lady A
I could easily add my voice: I could easily add my voice to your chorus. I can relate to your concise and to-the-point expression of frustration, although I've been around long enough to know that some people do eventually "get it". The hard way. Others never do, unfortunately. But no one ever said this world was fair. Nice work.