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S74rw4rd commented on: Silver Moon by satishverma 1 year 9 weeks ago
This sequence, its format,: This sequence, its format, and your mastery of it never fail to impress me.
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S74rw4rd commented on: Broken and Glorious Life by patriciajj 1 year 9 weeks ago
I have been reading Poetry: I have been reading Poetry for fifty years as of this past April.  I have been privileged to spend time with some of the greatest combinations of words by the greatest combiners:  Vergil, John Milton, Wallace Stevens. T. S. Eliot; and, since early 2020, Patriciajj.  I have said, repeatedly, that the posting of one of Patricia's poems is an event; the way the appearance of a new star on the face of the sky is an event.     In the decades I have been reading, I have developed an appreciation for poems that depict a process; like when Vergil describes the making of Aeneas' shield, designed by Vulcan and forged in the Cyclopean furnaces; or, to cite a modern example, the way the Universe slowly disintigrates in Wallace Stevens' poem, "Chaos In Motion And Not In Motion."     This poem that Patricia has just posted is a process poem, and the process it depicts is not just a key to its own meaning, but an example of how her entire collection works.  She begins by showing us two of the primary functions of Poetry as it has come to be understood in the West:  the application of metaphor and simile (in this poem, she begins with siimiles) to show us the unity of existence; and the refurbishing of dismantled memories---so that the memories refurbished by the Poet become what she calls, and what is, a life changing knowledge that proceeds to its ultimate purpose---the declaration of Love.  I will cite just one precedent for this, although I suppose that examples abound:  Eliot's words, in the first section of The Waste Land, tell us that the mix of memory and desire stirs dull roots with spring rain.  This happens even in what Eliot, in that poem, calls the Dead Land; and in what, near the end of this poem, Patricia characterizes as a vast cathedral, crumbling or glorious---depending on one's perspective  This is a paradox---another process which Poetry reveals to us, because we are creatures of both paradox and contradiction:  we praise the day's bright sunlight and then cover our eyes and squint, and we scare ourselves with ghost stories at night, and then, when we can't sleep, we stay up and begin to recognize constellations.  Even the most important event in History seems, to us, to be a paradox:  the brutally battered and mutilated body of a carpenter, nailed by spikes of Roman iron to two beams of local wood, is also the God Who not only designed and constructed the entire Cosmos, but was also revealed to us as Love---Love (not hatred, not self-righteousness, not conformity) as the God of Life and Salvation.       Ordinary prose, which, for so many of us, passes for attempted poetry when it is stacked (like piles of manure) in vertical arrays, cannot delineate the paradox:  the wishful thinking of the wannabe is never fulfilled in the achieved art of the real Poet, when that Poet has been revealed among us.  Then that Poet begins to tell us what the processes of this existence our, and what are the paradoxes inherent in those processes:  whether that Poet is living on a farm in Mantua and describes ordinary shepherds hering their sheep and falling in love; or a lawyerly insurance executive, between meetings or conferences, sitting at his desk and contemplating the paradoxical relationship between the imagination and reality.        I have tried, during the last three years, to offer interpretations on Patricia's poems as they appear; so that, when I look back, I think I have put together several suggestions of how to interpret her work, and how her poetic artistry and skill actually operate.  But I also believe that, someday, there will be a much larger proliferation of commentary on her poems.  I still believe that what we are privileged to watch, here at PostPoems, is the steady accumulation of one of the greatest poetic structures of our time.  Sure, someone will doubt this assertion; will dismiss it as too expansive; and I will point to those same persons certain published essays, from the roaring twenties, that dismissed The Waste Land as tripe, and declared that Wallace Stevens' poems were merely verbal stunts written for their shock value.  But who now really remembers those essays except as laughing stocks in the shadow of the verbal grandeur that those two Poets created simultaneously in one of the most verbally elegant periods of time in human history.         During my undergrad years, the courses in literature that I attended operated from a sort of united purpose:  not to establish a single reading of whatever poem, or novel, or tale we were reading, but to place that item within the context of a literary canon.  This was one of the influences that Old Possum, the great Eliot, brought to Literature:  that it did not happen as individual outbursts with blinkers on, but occurred as part of a Canon---so that one may trace a lineage (or, if you like, a literary DNA) from Vergil, to Dante, to Eliot and Stevens, and to Patriciajj.  While we readers (especially those who are scholars) do this, the Poet's perform a similar tracing:  they trace the processes that are the basic functions of the Universe as Christ, Who is Love, designed it.      They tell me that Einstein, in his theoretical researches, determined that the Cosmos consisted of four basic forces or processes, and that he proposed (although he never discovered) a mathematical statement that would account for those processes simultaneously.  This, on the poetic level, is what Vergil did---and the forces he located were shepherding, farming, and the destruction and construction of cities.  This, on that same poetic level, is what Patricia's Poetry does; in each of her poems (sometimes it is centrally displayed, sometimes more subtle in its presentation; but always utterly and ecactly consistent), and, with great awe and admiration, we see that same demonstration in this triumphant poem.
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patriciajj commented on: Broken and Glorious Life by patriciajj 1 year 9 weeks ago
That was the effect I was: That was the effect I was going for. Thank you for recognizing that and for taking the time to read my work with such perception and appreciation. Means so much. 
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SilverDawn commented on: Keepers by SilverDawn 1 year 9 weeks ago
thank you for your kind: thank you for your kind comment.
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patriciajj commented on: To The Dawn by SilverDawn 1 year 9 weeks ago
I love the lilting beauty and: I love the lilting beauty and ecstatic charm of this stunning aubade. Anything that makes me feel genuinely good deserves high praise. Thank you for this burst of light. 
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SilverDawn commented on: Broken and Glorious Life by patriciajj 1 year 9 weeks ago
Such a clear picture painted: Such a clear picture painted here, love and life as seen with eyes that see truly without adding where there is no need to add.
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patriciajj commented on: PROGRESS by Solitary_Dreamer 1 year 9 weeks ago
With open eyes and: With open eyes and unflinching candor, you see what's going on and where it is taking us. I'm comforted that many young people are rejecting the hyperindividualism that keeps humanity trapped in a self-destructive loop.    Very important commentary. Well said! 
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patriciajj commented on: . by metaphorist 1 year 9 weeks ago
I love it! You took what most: I love it! You took what most women consider to be a biological inconvenience and, with poetic charisma and an upbeat perspective, turned it into a celebration of femininity, even a song of gratitude for a magnificent gift.    An astonishing treatment of a subject too many poets have fumbled. Excellent!   
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patriciajj commented on: Keepers by SilverDawn 1 year 9 weeks ago
It's a great pleasure to: It's a great pleasure to discover your enchanting work.   The message in this mystical, embracing and sparkling wonder is one of precious consolation. Who the keepers are might be different things to different readers, but their sacred mission is the same: to bring hope, renewal and rebirth.   Metaphorically magnificent and spiritually illuminating. Every line, gleaming with ethereal beauty, is a treasure.  
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S74rw4rd commented on: . by metaphorist 1 year 9 weeks ago
I have been reading Poetry: I have been reading Poetry for fifty years as of this past April, but I have never seen this subject matter presented like this.  And I think this poem is one of the supreme demonstrations of your artistic and verbal skill:  because it shows us the paradox of writing both delicately, in your chosen words, and forcefully in the meaning you intend to convey.  This is why you are one of the pillars of PostPoems, and why I try (not always successfully, due to my circumstances) to keep up with your new poems as you post them.  
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Teytonon commented on: All that, and a bag of chips by Teytonon 1 year 9 weeks ago
Hi. So true..: Hi. So true. Have you heard the term 'shrinkflation'? It's the sneaky way consumers get screwed. The price of the product will remain the same, but you're getting less for the same money. What do you get in those small 50 cent bag of chips? It's half empty before you open it! Thanks for your comment. 
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S74rw4rd commented on: Christians Aren't Supposed To Get Revenge by randyjohnson 1 year 9 weeks ago
This poem, which is: This poem, which is significantly different than your several funereal poems, may very well be the most important poem that you have posted here at postpoems.  You have offered a great testimony to one of the chief principles of the Christian Faith.  You are absolutely correct that Christians are not to seek revenge; as the Apostle Paul tells us in Romans 12:19. You also reminded me, in this poem, that only a Christian  has the right to instruct, and question or discuss the behavior of another Christian.  As Proverbs 27:17 (which I read in the LXX translation of the Orthodox Church) Iron sharpens iron; in other words, like addresses and assists like when it comes to spiritual matters.  And your faith is quite evident in this poem, and this poem calls all of its readers who believe to greater vigilance upon their own behavior. I applaud you for posting this.  I, for one, hope you will post more Christian testimony poems.
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lyrycsyntyme commented on: All that, and a bag of chips by Teytonon 1 year 9 weeks ago
Inflation adjustment: Due to inflation, it's now "they're not all that and a single chip". Or else you're just setting the standards impossibly high.
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S74rw4rd commented on: My Vision by satishverma 1 year 9 weeks ago
I have not been able to: I have not been able to comment much on your work, lately, but I still applaud your work in this particular form, and the way you put so much into such a small space---like Chopin's Nocturnes and Preludes.
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S74rw4rd commented on: Foggy Menial Shakedown by J-C4113D 1 year 9 weeks ago
Thank you very much.: Thank you very much.
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