Searching for a way to Sacramento
Leaving these dark east clouds behind
Because maybe this way they’ll remember me,
caught under the waves,
asleep in the sand,
a writer on a park bench under a palm tree.
Pros and cons, back and forth
Weddings and funerals
as the hourglass of the storm ticks away
All I can think, all I can dream
is maybe in Sacramento it’s blue
Maybe they see the light of day.
But not this blue,
the view of the rain clouds and the puddles and my chest and my veins that struggle to wake up every morning.
I poke them.
I have to remind them, order them around so they pump my blood and keep me from turning into one of those empty body suits on the street over there, straining against a gray concrete existence.
No, not this blue.
The blue of the sky you can drink
and the ocean you can touch
with fingers that have never even been buried in sand,
fingers that haven’t even left home yet.
Hey, Sacramento, I’m willing to try
Unlike a lot of those clouds that slip by
and make out like they’re moving on to somewhere
better and less idealistic than there.
No, Sacramento, I’m a dreamer like you
and I know right now I’m a stranger to you
but I won’t be a stranger for very long
if you open my postcard and start humming this song.
Wrap me in the sunshine of the ocean view
and send me sea glass, a tiny piece of your blue
I’ll remember this promise, I swear it’s true
Hey, Sacramento, I’m coming to you
I was just agreeing
With HW.
Nobody should feel bad.
It was a lovely poem
Like how TSG writes.
I wrote a longer comment that I will
Put out as a poem.
KS
Poetic License
Is a Poet's Dream.
You can ( or not )
Quote me
I just came up with that.
Even though I already know
The Sacramento is further from the ocean than I am, you've still painted a picture that makes me wanna go.
So, make that 3 tickets
"Music is a universal language and needs not be translated. With it, soul speaks to soul" - Songsterr
Make that
two tickets,please.
such a flow and ebb mood of blue to make me sway.
ahhhhhh refreshingly wonderful!
hugs,Koko
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Words
Um... hate to break it to you
Um... hate to break it to you but Sacramento has no ocean view. It's a few hours to the shores from there. Unless there's some other Sacramento somewhere that I don't know about. You might wanna try San Diego.
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No!
It was dreamy as her dream
cant we just leave aesthetics out of it?
it is her sweetly well done ebb n flow that makes this wonderful!!
I knew that there was no ocean in Sacramento!I live in California
please leave an artist to their art
critique ain't criticizing.
you go to SanDiego,I'll go to Hawaii.
yeah, yay, Roc 3 tickets, she painted such a nice picture!
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Now yall made me feel like an
Now yall made me feel like an ahole. I suppose Sacremento could even be a person. But, I was just suggesting that if she really was gonna go she might be in for a surprise. The poem and the feeling it evokes are beautiful.
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HW ...Awww ....
let's just all get on a plane together and go to Hawaii!
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I'm ready for Hawaii. Who's
I'm ready for Hawaii. Who's buyin?
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Yeah
who? Lmao
ahhhh man! We just would have such fun!
:)
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No, I didnt know that but
No, I didnt know that but probably still would have kept it the same...it works better :)
*tallsquirrelgirl* she feels in italics and thinks in CAPITALS ~henry james
as stated above, I now read
as stated above, I now read Sacramento a little differently. I've just spent a little time in that place. It rained for the whole week. But it normally has blue skies. I do have an affinity for the way you write.
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Thank you!
Thank you! Both for the praise & criticism.
*tallsquirrelgirl* she feels in italics and thinks in CAPITALS ~henry james
Thanx HW
I didnt have the heart to break it
That the poetic license
Was a bit off course.