Right fit wrong love.

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Soul mates

In a moment of stupidity
I lean in for that deliberate kiss
And in the same split second
come to my dazzled senses
This is not right!?
The oceans following the moon
Is so right,
The stars in a blanket of night
Is so right
The river coursing through the canyons
Is so right,
The warmest hug in winter
Is so right,
The simpatico of great friends
Is so right;
The honest touch of understanding
Is so right,
The gentle love flowing between lovers
Is so right,
The fire of desire, a perfect attraction
Is so right,
The perfect fit
You are all these things to me personified
So how can it still be so wrong?
What do they know?
Now that it's been this way so long...

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Beavis's picture

;-)

Love it!

SSmoothie's picture

Really! :D hey, sure you

Really! :D hey, sure you don't think I should delete a second 'is so right' or two!? ;p see I learn for keeps master!


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Beavis's picture

Lol!

I like it as is! I think that if you tinker with the "is so right" aspect", you will end up totally reworking the poem into something completely different. I like what you have here, the repetition works well for effect, but it could be an interesting creative process to explore ;-)