I didn't really like this one, the rhythm was too structured, the rhyme too strict...and when I read it aloud in my creative writing class I was embarassed because most of my other work is somewhat free-form...(I really don't enjoy writing couplets and quatrains and all that jazz, just not my thing)
but my friend Charlie said it was hypnotizing...so I kind of like it now...I do enjoy the message and emotions I put into this...and I feel that they do hypnotize me, and when I read it I find myself actually visualizing what I've written...
I wrote this when I first started dating Chewface (my boyfriend). I'd had a bad day and was talking to him on the phone as I wrote it, and when I was done I was amazed, I had kinda zone out while writing it, and just things spilled out...anywho...enjoy!
