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Salvation
I can still taste the grape juice from your lips.
I know every night he tastes it too.
Don't preach to me about salvation,
after he curls up and feels the insides of you.
Your God is synthetic.
Their lies are pathetic.
Intolerance isn't prophetic,
and true love isn't heretic.
the first four lines really
the first four lines really hit me
I loved them
I almost wanted them to go on
like they started telling a story and then it changed into a rant
it almost feels like 2 different poems to me
the best bit which keeps bouncing off the walls in my brain is:
"Don't preach to me about salvation,
after he curls up and feels the insides of you."
i just the way as he curls up and feels the insides of you hits me, it lands right in my soul and makes me feel all sorts of odd feelings about my current situations
I think we shall be great poet friends (or I may just be your creepy poet stalkers jks)
Much Love
Ashley
Thanks for the feedback Ashley!
Sometimes I think holding back a little and leaving parts out intentionally is fun, because it leaves more to the reader's imagination! In this case, I thought me writing more would dilute things a bit, so I left it short. I'm glad you can relate to it, and I hope it only leads you to a positive conclusion about your current situations.
I'd love to be friends :)
:) you need to write more or
:) you need to write more or post more
it's hard to stalk you when there is nothing to stalk jks :)
Much Love
Ashley
:P
It's hard! This is all new to me, and a majority of what I write sucks, so I trash most of it!
oh come now let us judge
oh come now let us judge that, it might be better than you think it is
a lot of my work I hate and I post it and others love it
Much Love
Ashley
I
sent you a PM :)
Short, but will a powerful
Short, but will a powerful message. Well done.
Thanks
:)
Strong and Powerful
I love it. It is strong and powerful and honest. Wow.
Welcome.
Thank you
:)