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The beast
The beast lies in wait
it pretends to sleep...
I know that it just might
might creep...
it hides down low
it tickles and pulls the
sinews of panic
and rushes the
nerves to attack
and blood lust
will feed the ache
till then the beast lies in wait...
Anonymous Beast
Need a few more clues as to the nature of this beast. Is it a fill in the blank beast? Expansion is a virtue, vagueness an indication of more work needed - Lady A
It is your beast. You would
It is your beast. You would know it better than I would. I can not describe it for you. Only for me. :) The beast is more about a possession by an idea or or object or thing that you may have a desire for and try to scheme for.
If its possible, no matter what it always starts with a dream!
Inner Beast Wants Out
Scratches from the inside, pushing at the ribcage,
causes the heart to pause, stop, start again.
The scheme is more beast than notion
demon, not desire or object. The claws
are vampiric aged and newly honed to cut.
No measure of hypnosis or theapy works here
or in nightscapes running rampant as if
four legs push it up the esophagus
to spill from the tongue in blood and gut
lines to make my thoughts pagan
and my goodness evil. - Be well and thanks for the answer
Lady A
perhaps I could change the
perhaps I could change the blood lust line as the Vampiric comericalised age has saturated its meaning a little more on the physical side rather than a longing in your blood... thanks for the review Lady A kind regards. Mav
If its possible, no matter what it always starts with a dream!
Change is not alway good
The only thing I'd change is the repetition of the world "might"
just might is intersting too...but the poem is done. I enjoyed it tremendously - Looking forward to reading tons more - Lady A
HA HA!!!! FINALLY A POST!!!
HA HA!!!! FINALLY A POST!!! NOT BAD! NOT BAD AT ALL! ;) I Cant wait to see more! Cheers SS
Don't let any one shake your dream stars from your eyes, lest your soul Come away with them! -SS
"Well, it's love, but not as we know it."
Lol! It's just a quickie!
Lol! It's just a quickie! Don't judge me on it! It's mostly to shut you up! LOL!
If its possible, no matter what it always starts with a dream!
Oh No!
You gave SS a quickie?
That's not going to shut her up..
It's only fuel to her fire. <3
This is one of those poems as I have said before that you can either add, or take away.
There is an opaque quality around your write to where I cannot wait to read more.
I enjoyed this "quick scribble."
^_^
"We are, Each of us angels with only one wing, and we can only fly by embracing one another." -Luciano De Crescenzo
Shut Me Up Too
Nag, nag, nag - write more you. Impatiently awaiting your next gem in smoothesque lines - Lady A