My dearest friend and I
have been long denied
separately longing our appointed time
beating deep on the inside
was soul bearing pride
finally confessing that half was shamefully terrified
but one cant be denied when the soul strives
nor able to put aside
its inner groans and cries
I suffer internally and bleed through you
you are my strength
overthrown by few
when we are alone
we exceed conversation
moving on to wonder and imagination
by removing the cloak and tearing the veil
you leave me free and totally revealed
this is an emptiness that you alone fill
when my lips subdue you give me voice
enlightening the multitudes with my concept
against disperity you give me choice
when deep in regression you give me expression
when misunderstood
you cure my depression
always sharp on the point
you only dull under pressure
while releasing expressions of a wretched transgressor
alone in the universe for me you waited
manifesting dreams
preparations, and training
receiving your lesson of expressions and release
are my favorite traits
now embedded in me
a bond filled with magic and mystery
you alone match my grace and wit
I humbly wield your virtue
your naked revelation is a true divine gift.
Great use of language from
Great use of language from beginning to end. There is a real cleverness throughout this poem, particularly displayed in lines like "you alone match my grace and wit", which may be my second favorite expression the poem. Nothing tops this, though:
"when we are alone
we exceed conversation
moving on to wonder and imagination"
That's an award winning poem all by itself. At least in my humble opinion. This is very special, on the whole. Three poetic dimensions of motivation, passion and brillance colliding.
When I wrote this poem, i was
When I wrote this poem, i was filled with an intensity that literally MOVED me to write, it felt like something took me ove, the words just flowed out of me
Stopped in to read this one
Stopped in to read this one again. The way you speak of the words flowing out of you is quite on display in the poem. The fluidity is outstanding.
Thank you so so much! Im so very glad and humbled to hear that you enjoyed it!
“...you only dull under pressure...”
Mesmerizing line - can see why it is favorite ~S~
Lol its one of my favs too
thanks for that, i like that line too, My favorite line is the very LAST one!
Revisiting this again, it is
Revisiting this again, it is just as good on the second read!
Starward
and i can never thank you enough
thank you so much! glad to know it has it same effect! lol<3
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The fifth stanza is one of
The fifth stanza is one of the most brilliant sets of lines that I have ever read! It took my breath away, and I had to read it twice just to make sure it really says what it says. I have been reading poetry since spring of 1973, and this is one of the finest poems I have ever read since that time.
Starward
OMG thank you soooo much!
I whole heartily appreciate that! This is one of my favs because I wrote it when i decided to get back into writing! Lol when it comes to writing, lol i have a love and hate thing. lol thanks again <3