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prison for one
My mind is my own prison,
my thoughts but inmates in their cell.
Sometimes released to slowly roam,
but then pulled back into their home.
Sometimes they fight for freedom,
to try and escape their bane.
though an exit is found for some,
all of their efforts are in vane.
And just as I can see the light,
freedom is quickly pulled from sight.
Dragged secretly down unhallowed halls,
faceless men guarding its decaying walls.
Back to my jail of steel and stone,
And again I’m forced to be alone.
You don't like it????
Can i have it then????
your supposed to be the reasonably happy one!!! I'm the depressed one! You get the emotion across too well in some cases.
I like it....sorry can't offer any advice for changes.
Loves
Kit
i don't like you
serious criticsim HA!
Okay where to start.
First the last two lines are amazing so don't ever change:)
the only thing that really bothers me about it is how you continuous change in the way you rhyme. First you go every line then you convert over to every second.I don't know. You should like it though I think it's pretty good
nikki
Nicole.J.Burgesss
well i do :)
Much Love
Ashley