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* Broken Heart *
the pain from a broken
heart can last for
several long years all
of those lies you told
me that is what hurt me
the most, if you really
didnt love me the truth
would have been so much
better on me from the start.
before our relationship got
so serious to that point but
now it is too late i feel like
i want to die i no longer have
the heart to love anymore. my body
and soul has became cold and empty
i thought i would never get to this
part but i was so very wroung to
believe that. but i will get over
it someday in the future without you
Simple honest poetry... liked them
I can really relate
to this Poem i am going
through this kind of pain now
this is a beautiful Poem.
Boy, do I know how that feels. Great description of a broken heart.
Wow, I can feel every single word...amazing.
Gail,
Your poem shows alot of emotion and expresses how many of us have felt about a love that went sour. Don't waist your life pining away over someone who obviously is not worthy of your time. Good poem.
Teresa
I really liked this, alot of raw emotion behind each sentence..
Aww... The emotions described is terribly sad and felt throughout. Well done on this one...
I saw that you commented on one of my poems so I thought I would check out some of yours. I especially like this one. You write so beautifully.
tht is wat i call soooooo kooooooooooool keep it up I like your work n dont hav wurds to tell u how fabulous it is!!
i like this poem it is a good one keep writing
wow this poem is beautiful.....
i... i cried....
you left some lovey critique on my poems so a wanted to read some of yours. this is a amazing poem and you should feel very proud. I no how you feel about this subjects. If you wish you can email me on pagan663@hotmial.com
very nice poem :)
Hollie C. Barringer
you checked out my poems... and i thought i would check out yours! yours are really good@ i really like these ones! where do u live? who are you and how old are you?
Its very hard to heal a heart once its broken, we've all been there.
You have put it into words brillantly.
Well done and keep up the good work.
Michelle
Great work! I am just getting the time to get into your work. Maaan, you have some serious volume on here! Sorry I have been in the studio and in a couple of arts showings, but I am off now and plan to catch up on some reading...so get ready!
I'm really not very good at critiquing poems, but I can definitely say I liked this piece a lot :)
Very nice poem, but sad. A broken heart takes a long time to heal. God bless you.
I LOVE THIS POEM. IT HITS HOME. I FELT LIKE THAT FOR A LONG TIME AFTER MY FIRST LOVE BROKE UP WITH ME BUT IT DOES EVENTUALLY GET BETTER. GREAT WRITING.
oh man, i nearly cried to this, i feel exactly the same way when it comes to this girl i like. she finally left and i thought id never see her again, but somehow i healed my broken heart, but she came back and the feelings were still there. so im broken heart again...oh well. good poem i really liked it!
I like this poem. I really like the way the poem is structured. I like the way it goes to next line in mid-sentence. The structure really helped convey the sadness of your words.
i really like this poem..good work..verey good work.
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love this. you are a nice and lovely person as could be seen from your little poem. keep your good work up!
Now this one is something I can relate to. I love the way in which there is hardly any punctuation, makes it seem like a rush, gabbling as quickly as possible to make the feelings heard, sort of fits with the subject :)
This is a sad note of life...love expressions of feeling. I was touched.
This is one of those poems that are sad...yet so nice and beautiful... I like your other poems too. You're have many good poems.........Mayra
Sweetie,
Wow. this poem is so deep. I really like it. <3 heh. And I just wanted to thank you for all your comments for my postpoems page. That really meant a lot! Maybe we can talk sometime in IM. AOL IM: DyingWithinYou
xoxo
Angela
this poem explains exactly how i feel on the inside. you took all my emoitions and explained them in a perfect way. great job!
i really like this one...you're really a passionate writer and you can feel the emotion in what you write. i appreciate what you write and appreciate the fact that you put it out there for everyone to read so that they can relate to what you've felt. it's amazing to me that hearts can be so strong in love and yet break so easily when the love is destroyed. i can relate in many ways to many of the poems you've written and that's also what i try to bring through in my poems for people. you're truly a great writer and i hope you keep up the great work. keep writing and i'll keep reading.
~*~April~*~
Very interesting poem - you wrote about your emotions very deep and very open.
First impression was that we have here amateur poetry. But in last few years many great poet-modern poets wrote in this "maneer" (that is not maneer in classic style, because we talk here about honest emotions).
Thank you for sharing with us your tallent.
With deepest respect,
Nikola
http://www.nikola-kitanovic.com
Hi, thanks for your comment.
This poem is sooo true and emotional. Very nice!
Just figured I'd return the favor......I think I'll crituqe 8 because that's a lotta poems here ^_^;; Not a lot coming from a novice but I love your work so far. On to poem #2
yeah, so your heart is broke? sad, tradgic, right? well look at the bright side, you got some good writing inspiration from it, i dont believe that any poet has not had their heart torn into a million tradgic bleeding black peices at least once in their lives,
~birdy
This was sad; but very inspiring at the end. Good work!
Sandie Angel :o)
ive read some of ur poems i didnt rely have time to read them all but i loved every 1 i read thankx 4 all you sed about my poems and the guy well things never worked out well if ur ever bored n need som 1 to talk to im me or sum on aim deshizzyforizzy muah love |mae|
this is a good poem i must admit
Dearest Gail
I can relate.
Take care,
Myra
What is in here is the absolute truth. I am very grateful to the fact that U passed by my corner which have gotten me here. I owe you all the respect and appreciation for all what you have penned. God Bless You.
Iyad
heartpiper
I really like this poem. Your poems are really great too!
Hey! This poem reminds me of how someone treated me in a meaningful relationship. Thanks for putting it into words, cause I don't think I could have done as good of job as you did. Great Work! ---Blondie8903
" You said something about my poems so I figured I would return the favor at the least I can do."
Your porm was really good i can see the pain and the way you handle things in your relationship as you know i went through something most likely like you did where the one you love turns on you and says that they were never really in love with you. This poem is by far very good in my eyes i can see and feel the emotion you must have put into it. Best of wishes for you to get over the pian and sarrow and you must always know theres all she/he wasn't the right one so don't lose hope. Have a good Day.
As I always say " Life is but a dream waiting for the dreamer to awaken."
Sincerly
Kevin, Linn
this is poignant and so sad well written and i feel the pain i am the expert at having broken hearts love like you never will lose the person is my motto still despite my past
Sometimes i think that maybe the person that you see yourself falling in love with, is totally oblivious to what is going on around them. It may not seem like a very serious relationship to them, but your life will never be the same again.
This poem described my ex (jessica) alot. She left me because she thought I was too serious I suppose, I haven't gotten a real explanation but anyways lol.
This poem puts words to how it feels, and its cool because this poem clearly examplifies the emotions that people grow through. Good work ;)
The context is real. Anyone who has been through this knows exactly how this scenerio plays out.
Your style has a very nice flow which makes it comfortable to read.
Well done.
Amy
Gentle is the night♥
I'm sorry for not replying to your comment sooner, but my computer has crashed, and it's taken me some time to make it to the library. Anyway, I think this is a good poem. It has many good ideas, perhaps I'm just partial to suffering. I think the poem could use a change of format, though. The way you have the lines set up makes it sort of choppy. Here's an example of a way you could change it
the pain from a broken heart
Lasts for many long years
all of those lies you told me,
those, those are what hurt me the most
If you didn't really love me,
The truth would have been easier
I would comment more, but I have just got done writing a paper, and I'm a bit pressed for time, I will critique more of your work when I can. Keep writing!
~Bryant
I am feeling this poem.I can relate to it very much.I know what it feels like to have a broken heart.
my first bf and my first love dumped me almost 4 long months ago and I'm still not over it. my heart still aches and I still cry myself to sleep. I love this poem because it captures the strong feeling and emotion of the broken hearted. great job
Broken hearts do heal; just not fat enough. Great poem.
Just wanted you to know I am already loving your work. Great stuff. I am continuing on. I know I will be pleased.