He wanted her to know he loved her 

and that his love would never stop

He thought…what if I shouted ‘I Love You’ 

from the highest mountain top?


Surely then what’s in my heart 

she would understand

when she hears my words ride upon the wind

or echo off the land.


And then he thought…what if we walked along the water’s edge

together hand in hand

and I stopped…drew a heart and wrote, 

‘I Love You’ in the sand


Surely then she’d understand 

I could not love her more

when she sees what’s in my heart…

written on the shore.


But then he realized…words written in the sand 

or echoed from the mountain quickly fade away.

He wanted something that would last forever

something that would stay.


Something permanent to let her know

the love in his heart would never disappear…

So every day he holds her close


and whispers “I Love You”…in her ear.

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E.Helena's picture

Love this!

Love this!

Do good. Be good.

lyrycsyntyme's picture

Sweet words. Love is indeed a

Sweet words. Love is indeed a repeated act over time. 


A recommendation, if it's okay: The line "or echoed from the mountain quickly fade away" might preserve and even further enhance the flow of the poem more so if it were a bit condensed. It feels a bit out of time with the rest of the poem, as it is written. This type of approach sometimes is very effective, but considering the placement of the line in the poem, it might be more effective to try to condense the concept in that line a bit. Just a thought, hopefully it's a useful thought to you.


Either way, loving words very much in the grain of the romantic era.