Look into my eyes

Look into my eyes
Tell me what you see.
Do you see someone beautifull deep inside of me?

Look into my eyes 
Tell me what you see
Do you see something ugly, that lies beneath me?

Look into my eyes
Tell me what you see
Do you see my pain and agony?

Look into my eyes
Tell me what you see
Do you see my love and feelings?

Look into my eyes
Tell me what you see
Do you see my past?

Look into my eyes
Tell me what you see
Do you see a future, ahead of me?

Look into my eyes,
And tell me, what do you see?

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twisted_soul's picture

Eyes are the most beautiful

Eyes are the most beautiful thing on a human, at least I think so. I only wish I can see your's, and every one of my friends on this site, eyes. but im sure they say alot more than mine can lol. but great job, i dont think you should change it but it seems a bit short, again not a totaly negative comment, just knowing you, you could have said a lot more. still loved it tho XD

Elfy's picture

Lol I agree, and they are my

Lol I agree, and they are my favorite part of a person. They show love, life, story's, feelings, emotions, and they show lies, hate, anger, depression, confusion. Everything. And if your someone who is able to look past your own hardships, you will see another's feelings and emotions and story's throught their eyes. You have seen them before lol through my picture that was on here. And don't think that, your eyes say as much as you allow them to, some times ever more. Your eyes say more then your mouth some days. Thank you as always hon. I won't change it, but I agree could be longer lol. I just always seem to ramble and I didn't have too much to say the day I wrote it. So it was a short quick poem. I'll prob add more, or I won't, we will have to wait and see. Lol I know I could have written more. Glad you did.:)


-Elfy*

twisted_soul's picture

my story is a long one filled

my story is a long one filled with pain suffering sprinkled with good things, but im an optimist so hell it aint to bad. and good point for got about that pic lol, one of those day right? lol and i guess i will see or not, idk im not a psychic

MatthewWayne's picture

hmmmm, I'm not sure if your

hmmmm, I'm not sure if your aware but I too have a poem called "look into my eyes" and I must say while two are on different subjects I find myself liking yours much better than my own maybe thats just being biased but I loved the word play in this one :) very beautiful. I bet theres a lot your eyes can and will tell me.


"I am my own sort of strange, a supernova of madness and brillance. Forced to share the same space and time. Sane enough to not be seen, yet not crazy enough to be heard." -- Matthew Wayne

Elfy's picture

Hmm maybe, I'm not sure, I

Hmm maybe, I'm not sure, I wonder if I commented or read it? Idk lol. I'll have to look and see if I read that one. Lol thanks hon, but I'm sure yours is amazing and puts this little poem to shame. :)
Your prob biased ;) as I am with my own I'm sure. Lol thank you. My eyes will tell you anything, that your willing to look for, and listen to.


-Elfy*

SSmoothie's picture

Awsome write

I agree ...do you se a future a head of me? Top stuff! :)


Don't let any one shake your dream stars from your eyes, lest your soul Come away with them! -SS    

"Well, it's love, but not as we know it."

Elfy's picture

Thanks ssmothie! Lol I see a

Thanks ssmothie! Lol I see a future for everyone, as long as they allow themselfs to have it. :)


-Elfy*

SSmoothie's picture

Agreed! Nice one!

As long as they let them selves have one ;)


Don't let any one shake your dream stars from your eyes, lest your soul Come away with them! -SS    

"Well, it's love, but not as we know it."

thisisme789's picture

That's incredible! It's nice

That's incredible! It's nice and soft reading, and flows quite nicely. I really liked it!


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