My breath stops.
And I hold it through the feeling.
Feeling you close,
I let it go.
There's an aura
Surrounding,
Resounding,
Through me
In me, around me.
I'm so filled with completeness
That, my body falls limp
Before you.
Ah!
Loneliness escapes
Back into his shadows
The light you bring me
Beats it from my breast.
And then the tenderness begins.
Soft, and shallow, fast and deep,
Hold me,
Let me go.
There's a sweetness
surrounding us,
Resounding us,
In each breath
In each kiss
The promise of completeness
That I fall limp
Before you
Ah!
Surrounding, resounding,
Love is a shared emotion
Caught in tidal motion,
Love
Ahhhhh
...Aaah - YES!
I'm not one to give detailed critiques so this one will be easy fore me because I can critique it in one word...Ahhhh