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One, two, step
one, two, step
dancing ever close.

One, two, step
one, two, step
not even a word to say.

Hands held together
and eyes interlocked
two lovers in the night.

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last updated 26 March 2012 - 7:44pm
©26 March 2012 - 5:06pm — Adam아담
7 April 2012 - 1:51am — cassiebee
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:)

i really liked this! it's great!!

The Princess in Waiting

 

28 April 2012 - 4:58pm — Adam아담
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Cassie:

Thanks!!

Cheers,
Adam_San

26 March 2012 - 5:30pm — thisisme789
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I love this one!

I love this one!

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27 March 2012 - 5:33pm — Adam아담
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How do you feel about

How do you feel about the "one, two, step" in it? What does that make you feel? (I hope it doesn't sound like something Dr. Seuss would write...)

Cheers,
Adam_San

28 March 2012 - 12:38pm — thisisme789
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silly you!

I like it! It makes it obvious that the people being talked about, are dancing. It could be LIKE something that Dr. Seuss might write, but I think that it's hard not to write something that could be described as something that Dr. Seuss might write, since things like that is what she mostly wrote about. I also think that this poem NEEDED the "one, two, step" in it, to show that you aren't just mentioning dancing, but that the poem includes the dancing. Nice write!

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29 March 2012 - 2:03pm — Adam아담
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Thanks Moriah. Good points -

Thanks Moriah. Good points - maybe you should be my editor ;)

Cheers,
Adam_San

29 March 2012 - 5:13pm — thisisme789
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lol, sounds fun, if you're

lol, sounds fun, if you're serious ^_^

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