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just a pawn
a girl should be quite precautious to convey
her hopes for happiness as it sometimes is bound to dismay
bound by narrative in knots so tight
it is a story that sways her to others' delight
she’ll entertain such rumors until it's unveiled
they only want what they want as her heart is assailed
so let unwilling streams flow down her face
it seems she going to feel another heartaches embrace
now we all know it is a game with its winners and losers
kings, queens, princes, princesses and some mean abusers
she cannot comprehend what answer can be drawn
she feels in this game of love she is just a pawn
Wow. You hit my heart.
Wow. You hit my heart.
sorry
I wasn't aiming for your heart, I was tring to reach your mind
be well
keep believing in yourself
Peace
Dylan
"One of the best results of life, is the torment of love"
Dylan Eliot
This desribes my life to a T
This desribes my life to a T right now. Thank you.
Nice read. But I don't think
Nice read. But I don't think love should be a 'game'. It's more of an exchange...
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I am in total agreement
and you are right, life and love are not games.
Love is a give and take.
This poem is not about a hearts like yours.
The poem was an attempt in a figurative sense to bring to light that there some “people” in this world who think that everything is a game or a competition of sorts.
The players know who they are, and we all lose when they think that they have won.
Peace
Dylan
"One of the best results of life, is the torment of love"
Dylan Eliot
Loss is a matter of
Loss is a matter of perception. Loss that creates the loss of a burden can be liberating. Loss that creates pain can be an inner signal to heed our insight and attention. Everything is perception. I love the poem because I find many things in the outer world a game. Even love, as I have used fables and fairytales to cjole and soothe the hearts of many children in physical pain of which man's drugs had not use for them. In chess I love the horse!! As you can win by the slightest shift of perception and see the 'game' from many angles, and not just the one that carries the pain. Balance is the hero of all...even the players...'winners' and 'losers'!!!
...and he asked her, "do you write poetry? Because I feel as if I am the ink that flows from your quill."
"No", she replied, "but I have experienced it. "
ahh,
ones own perception is their own reality.
and yes, the Knight is a very useful piece, but the Queen she is the most useful.
thanks again for your concise insights
Peace
Dylan
"One of the best results of life, is the torment of love"
Dylan Eliot
True...the queen is very sly
True...the queen is very sly and can rule the knight with skill.
...and he asked her, "do you write poetry? Because I feel as if I am the ink that flows from your quill."
"No", she replied, "but I have experienced it. "
The comments to this poem
The comments to this poem have become very philosophical. Take pride in your ability to inspire thought through your words (:
Thank you
again, I really don't like this poem all that much, I think my assonance was not my best, not a favorite. But if you
like great poetry, read this poet, she is truly one of the best in the world
http://www.postpoems.org/authors/life_used_to_be_lifelike/poem/956229
peace
Dylan
"One of the best results of life, is the torment of love"
Dylan Eliot
...and there we have...the
...and there we have...the 'game' in it's beauty. :-)
...and he asked her, "do you write poetry? Because I feel as if I am the ink that flows from your quill."
"No", she replied, "but I have experienced it. "
cheers
let the game begin
peace
gotta to run to the doctor now wish me luck
"One of the best results of life, is the torment of love"
Dylan Eliot
You clearly have a lot of
You clearly have a lot of experience in writing. I enjoyed this greatly.
thank you
the writing part is the easy part. It is my love of words. An avocation of sorts... The hard part are the experiences, well, some harder than others. It is finding essential phrases that convey universal feelings. I am sure you will be more than an able craftperson, apply your knowlegde and experience, check your spelling, and grammer too. Find the essence... To me that is what the written word is... in poetry... it is the essence.
enjoy
http://www.postpoems.org/forum/open-for-various-styles/free-verse-rhyme/934806
Peace
Dylan
"One of the best results of life, is the torment of love"
Dylan Eliot
I always liked the horse
I always liked the horse because you can play so many different angles. ;-)
...and he asked her, "do you write poetry? Because I feel as if I am the ink that flows from your quill."
"No", she replied, "but I have experienced it. "
I
always liked the ROOK, you know by hook or by ROOK!
if it were so easy as just a game...
peace
"One of the best results of life, is the torment of love"
Dylan Eliot