My First Poem (I use the term loosely):
This is a small excerpt from a 4 page rough draft of my first poem ever and my interest in poetry writing began about 3 hours ago. I have no idea what I’m doing, but I do know I have valid reason for wanting to see if I can learn to express myself through this medium. I do know enough to know that this isn’t a good poem. Despite that, I’m looking at this as jumping off point to get feedback.
Here is why I wrote it (or wrote anything creative at all):
I’ve never written creatively or had a particular desire to. However, I wrote and posted this poem (which is a small excerpt from a 4 page rough draft) because I was trying to write a text to a friend that I knew I could never send, but which I needed to compose just to express the complexity of my feelings on our situation. I'd spent almost two hours trying to parse all the things I wanted to say and was getting frustrated having spent so much time trying to express myself for what amounted to an email-length-text that would never be sent. Criticism
Feedback Desperately Needed:
Please feel free to rip it to shreds-- I expect to be bad (well, it is pretty bad-haha) but I'd love feedback on where to improve to see if this is something I might be able to make adaptations to write things that aren't bad, and thereby have a great medium express myself creatively .
I'm interested to write more stuff, incorporate adivice and suggestions, and see how it goes- I really enjoy it but only if I can produce something passible-- not cringy crap that never improves. Some people have inante abilities, some people have the ability to learn and some people have neither. I'm trying to determine if I might be one of those people that have the ability to learn, even with no inante giftings in that area. I guess you guys will ulitimately be the ones to tell me!
