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ewbonitz commented on: The Failure's Parents' Basement by rachel 3 years 42 weeks* ago* My favorite poem is called: My favorite poem is called Caged Bird by Maya Angelou. I memorized it after a good friend of mine committed suicide in high school. A free bird leaps on the back of the wind and floats downstream till the current ends and dips his wing in the orange sun rays and dares to claim the sky. But a bird that stalks down his narrow cage can seldom see through his bars of rage his wings are clipped and his feet are tied so he opens his throat to sing. The caged bird sings with a fearful trill of things unknown but longed for still and his tune is heard on the distant hill for the caged bird sings of freedom. The free bird thinks of another breeze and the trade winds soft through the sighing trees and the fat worms waiting on a dawn bright lawn and he names the sky his own. But a caged bird stands on the grave of dreams his shadow shouts on a nightmare scream his wings are clipped and his feet are tied so he opens his throat to sing. The caged bird sings with a fearful trill of things unknown but longed for still and his tune is heard on the distant hill for the caged bird sings of freedom. You needn't love your cage, Rachel. There's little to love about feeling trapped and unwanted. But I hope you realize that even in just writing this poem you are learning to sing, in spite of the prison of your current circumstance. The free bird may seem happier, but the caged bird possesses a depth of perseverance that can only be discovered during times of immense loneliness. I hope as you continue to sing through the hatred, that you also learn to sing in love. Not just romantically of course, but an even greater love, a love for yourself and the song you sing while you're feeling trapped. You are good enough exactly as you are and you deserve to be told so. Every human being is valuable just because they exist and I pray that you learn to sing on these beautiful things during this season of temporal inprisonment. Keep on singing, caged bird, you will find freedom someday. All things are possible for those who believe. [ go to comment ]
ewbonitz commented on: Dear Little Evan, #2 by ewbonitz 3 years 42 weeks* ago* Stay tuned, Starward. I've: Stay tuned, Starward. I've always dreamed of writing a book and in therapy last night I think I stumbled upon it. There's plenty of trauma where that comes from, but I've decided to dig through the rubbish and polish off the gems for some personal, and hopefully interpersonal healing as well! [ go to comment ]
Starward commented on: Dear Little Evan, #1 by ewbonitz 3 years 42 weeks* ago* This hits me in those parts: This hits me in those parts of my heart that have never fully recovered from similar treatment when I was in elementary school. [ go to comment ]
Starward commented on: Dear Little Evan, #2 by ewbonitz 3 years 42 weeks* ago* This is poignant, intense,: This is poignant, intense, and absolutely magnificent. Let me say again, more loudly---ABSOLUTELY MAGNIFICENT. The situation described, the situation that young Evan has to endure, is horrible, and I suspect it still occurs. (I experienced something similar, not exactly, but another situation of the school system punishing some students---myself included---for thinking outside the box, or thinking differently). You have written a gut-wrenching account that every parent of every unhappy student ought to read. [ go to comment ]
Starward commented on: The Failure's Parents' Basement by rachel 3 years 42 weeks* ago* You have described with: You have described with intense precision one of the seasons of my life---a time that began in Autumn, 1980, and lasted for a little over three years. My heart goes out to anyone who has experienced something like this, be it for hours or for years. [ go to comment ]
DaztheDruid commented on: TRULY LAST CALL FOR THE SNAKE by DaztheDruid 3 years 42 weeks* ago* I CAN'T WAIT ALL DAY: I CAN'T WAIT ALL DAY [ go to comment ]
DaztheDruid commented on: TRULY LAST CALL FOR THE SNAKE by DaztheDruid 3 years 42 weeks* ago* GETTING TIRESOME NOW: GETTING TIRESOME NOW SNAKE YOU OBVIOUSLY DON'T WANT TO DEAL SHOULD I HAND THINGS TO MR P??? I'M RATHER BUSY DELAYED FIRING TOO SO I COULD MEET YOU [ go to comment ]
georgeschaefer commented on: FRIDAY NIGHT AT THE CHESTNUT by georgeschaefer 3 years 42 weeks* ago* thank you for the kind words: thank you for the kind words [ go to comment ]
DaztheDruid commented on: NEW WEAPONS FOR BROTHERS OFBLUE by DaztheDruid 3 years 42 weeks* ago* MR P IIUITO: MR P IIUITO [ go to comment ]
karinich16 commented on: "Bus Boys" by KariSheppardPoetry 3 years 42 weeks* ago* Thank you: I am somehow just seeing your comment and thank you so much. I'm so glad you relate. Kari Sheppard Poetry on instagram for new poems. [ go to comment ]
Starward commented on: It's You by Blackspeare 3 years 42 weeks* ago* A comment from lyrycsyntyme: A comment from lyrycsyntyme is a very good reason to read the poem so commented on, and this poem is magnificent. I really enjoy the way you deployed words. One thing stumbled my eye was the change of second person address from "you" to "thee" and then back; and the change from second to third person address. Is the person in the first line the same as in the seventh line? (I am an old man, and I do not deny the possibility of my bad mis-reading of any given poem.) Still, despite these points (which may be more on my reading than on the poem), this poem is still beautifully presented. One aspect that caught my eye as an excellent verbal strategy was the dwindling length of the lines in the last five lines, and no punctuation following the last word---which, in this case, is an advantage, because it opens the field of possibility and leaves all sorts of questions unanswered, enhancing the sense of mystery that accompany such experiences. I really, really like this poem; it has my applause! [ go to comment ]
lyrycsyntyme commented on: It's You by Blackspeare 3 years 42 weeks* ago* I really love this line pair: "I ascertained that without thee I’m at sea If I don’t attain thee I’ll be missed for ages" It really encapsulates the state of mind of a devastating heartbreak, and it's lost time. Fantastic, on the whole. I didn't anticipate it all being a dream. Hopefully one that is to become reality for you ; ) [ go to comment ]
ramonathompsont commented on: UNTIL WE MEET AGAIN by joy 3 years 42 weeks* ago* broughts tears to my eyes as: broughts tears to my eyes as it made me think of my late father. Blessings to you for this wonderful, wonderful piece you have shared [ go to comment ]
DaztheDruid commented on: HEY CIA by DaztheDruid 3 years 42 weeks* ago* AIDY 72 HOURS 44 MILES WNW: AIDY 72 HOURS 44 MILES WNW OF LAST LOCATION. CHECK THE COFFEE SHOPS 3.15PM. HAPPY SOME HAVE SEEN S3NSE. POLYGRAPH NO PROBLEM. DON'T BOOK ANYTHING PAY CASH FOR EVERYTHING WRAP YOUR CIA PHONES IN TIN FOIL. I GOT TO SEE THE SNAKE FIRST GIVE THEM THE DEMANDS, AND OF COURSE THERE'S A WAR RAGING WITH AI TO BOOT. SO POSSIBILITIES OF BEING LATE [ go to comment ]
Starward commented on: commit to pen by redbrick 3 years 42 weeks* ago* The poem sounds like a: The poem sounds like a whispered conversation---and the fourth and fifth lines, along with the last, are comforting and reassuring. Although brief, the poem is emotionally powerful. [ go to comment ]