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Starward commented on: Eviction by adriannemerideth 2 years 25 weeks ago
A perfect Haiku, and it: A perfect Haiku, and it respects the proper syllabics of each line, as well.  Bravo!
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Starward commented on: Friend of Light by patriciajj 2 years 25 weeks ago
This poem, like a binary star: This poem, like a binary star system, has two centers of gravity---the first stanza, and the last.  Like Wallace Stevens poems, all of Patricia's that I have seen (and I keep a close watch) have a center of gravity.  And like Stevens, she moves the centers around between her several poems.  (Note to grad student looking for a subject for your dissertation:  make an xy graph like in analytical geometry, one of the axes represented the number of lines in each center, and the other representing those lines' position in the poem.  It will be interesting to see if she has a particular favorite position, or how many poems are represented by each positions.)  But, unlike Stevens, more than one of her poems are binary star systems---deploying to centers of gravity.    Perhaps, too, the simile of a sonata might be appropriate here.  Like the first movement of a classical sonata, there is a statement of a theme, and then a reply which becomes another theme.  The first and last stanzas work together in that way.  The first stanza states a question, or a need, that---I suspect---might have inspired the most ancient poetry.  The last stanza states the primary purpose for which all poetry exists:  the thank you to the Cosmos which we inhabit and which (I believe we are alone here) we are meant to explain and explicate to itself, and beyond the Cosmos, a thank you to the Cosmos-Maker.    (On a personal note, I am grateful, as an Orthodox Christian, for the poem's mention of icons.)
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Starward commented on: EPIPHANNY IN MARTINIQUE by georgeschaefer 2 years 25 weeks ago
I believe it.  You use the: I believe it.  You use the form as if you had invented the concept.
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Starward commented on: Finally Spring by allets 2 years 25 weeks ago
Thanks, I did not know she: Thanks, I did not know she had passed away.  When Tiptree suicided, I did not know that either.
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Starward commented on: The Complete Works Of Vladimir Lenin, Without Defect by J-C4113D 2 years 25 weeks ago
Thank you, and I am flattered: Thank you, and I am flattered beyond words that a Poet of your stature on this site would visit this poem.  I happen to believe that Lenin's primary motivation was to avenge his older brother's execution---hanging, after an attempt on the life of Alexander III, father of Nicholas II---and he found Marxism brought him a ready-made cadre of flatterers and sycophants (including his horse-faced wife; one sees her picture and understands why he also installed his girl friend in an apartment in the Kremlin after his Bolshevik Party came in) only too happy and eager to help him create a Revolution---they not realizong that his ambitions dovetailed with theirs only temporarily.  After the Romanovs and those with them were martyred (the brutal bastards that were appointed as their executioners even shot Alexei's dog), Lenin learned rather quickly that the Bolsheviks new little more about how to govern than the Romanovs did:  he quickly instituted War Communism, and then the NEP (which he described as state capitalism).  His last years in power were filled with the fear that Maria Romanov (who was the most socially accessible of the Grand Duchesses; during their imprisonment in the ominously named "House of Special Purpose" in Yekaterinburg---now the site of an Orthodox Church built to honor of the Romanov martyrs---the youngest of the guards became her boy friend, temporarily; and when Lenin heard of it, he hit the ceiling), whose body could not have been accounted for by the executioners, had somehow survived and would re-enter Russia at the head of Kolchak's forces and rid Russia of the Bolshevik inhumanity.  He had many sleepless nights, wondering if Maria was on her way back in (one wonders if she would have brought her boy friend, Ivan Kleschev, to the throne with her; Ivan had already declared, in the presence of witnesses, that he intended to rescue her:  did Lenin fear Ivan had succeeded?).  Lenin died in torment; in his last moments, he fell back on Orthdox liturgy whispering "Forgive me."    As for Joe Stalin, I agree:  his atrocities far exceeded those even of the Bavarian Corporal.  He made even more martyrs of the Orthodox Church than Lenin did---ironic, considering Joe Stalin had been a seminarian when he first discovered Marxism and met Lenin.  They say he only feared two women---Krupskaya, the horse-faced, and Alexandra Kollentai who had replaced Inessa Armand in Lenin's affections.  He appointed Kollentai as the first female ambassador in history, and Krupskaya had a chocolate factory named after her following her demise.  They tell me that one of the chocolate bars has been named for her, and can still be obtained today.    Mein Kampf taught in police academies?  Perhaps as an example of not to write.  I read large passages of the Bavarian Corporal's book quoted in Shirer's Rise And Fall Of The Third Reich (best paper I wrote in high school; ten pages minimum required, I brought in fifty-one).  I can only imagine what Mein Kampf would have been if Hess had not proofread and edited it as Hitler dictated it to him in Landsberg Prison in 1924.  And Hess was not that eloquent a writer, either.    As for Hiroshima and Nagasaki, my father (by adoption) would have been the third Marine landed on the Japanese main island (his death certificate, and those of the other Marines who would have been landed in that first wave, had already been filled out by the captain of the battleship Nevada.  Three days prior to the landing, the ship stopped dead in the water, swung around, and begin heading away from Japan at full speed.  He said the ship was literally vibrating with all its boilers lit, and trying to achieve top speed.  The scientists who built "Little Boy" had badly overestimated the blast radius, so the battleship was told to get out of there fast.  Harry Truman, in choosing to drop the bomb, saved my father's life.  Then Truman sent him to school on the GI bill, and my father became one of the area's top road surveyors.  During my first summer job, the summer after my paper on the Shirer book, people he had trained described him as an artist of exquisite skill and finesse on the transit.  My father turned an angle once, and once only:  subsequent surveys, some of which I participated in, never found an error.  My father adopted me and gave me a surname that goes back to colonial New England, and then beyond that to the time of Henry VIII and his girl friend, Anne Boleyn.  One of my great grandfather's paternal cousins, an astronomer, discovered what he believed to be a nebula (and is now known to be a galaxy) which still bears his name in the astronomical calendars.  His surname, and mine.  So then one might ask, why Starward and not my own name?  I am unworthy to be in that family due to the grief I caused my father in the seventies.  I grew my hair long, and wore bell-bottom jeans everywhere; at college, I walked to class barefoot (as did a good many of my classmates) or, at most, flipflops.  Though I was a nerd, I was, at least, a fashionable one.  (In the summer after freshman year, on the day after my birthday, I drove my paternal grandmother to our home for my party.  I had flops on, and she asked how could I stand that strap between my toes.  I said, "You know, you're right" and tossed them into the backseat, and, barefoot, drove her home, much to her amusement and my mother's distinct shock (I was always glad to piss my mother off.)  In some ways, I had all that because Harry Truman had chosen to drop the bomb.   I have been quite verbose because I was so flattered, as I said above, that a Poet of your accomplishment chose to visit this poem.  I very much appreciate the gesture, and your comment.  Stop by any time.
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georgeschaefer commented on: EPIPHANNY IN MARTINIQUE by georgeschaefer 2 years 25 weeks ago
you simply tell them that the: you simply tell them that the next upgrade for their iphone or android is inside the castle
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georgeschaefer commented on: EPIPHANNY IN MARTINIQUE by georgeschaefer 2 years 25 weeks ago
It is a form well suited to: It is a form well suited to my style and imagination.  thank you kindly
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Starward commented on: Untitled 15 by rachel 2 years 25 weeks ago
Visiting this poem, and the: Visiting this poem, and the conversation in the comment section that we shared (when you flattered me by your perception of similarities between us---you have no idea how flattering that was), and I cannot figure out why I have not been reading more of your poems more frequently.  I intend to correct that.
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Starward commented on: Untitled 14 by rachel 2 years 25 weeks ago
Revisiting this magnificent: Revisiting this magnificent poem, I realize that it presents the great, the fundamental paradox of our humanity---Love is the easiest thing in the world, as your poem points out, and the way toward it is smoothed by both our spiritual and our erotic desires . . . but the flaws in our humanity make it sooo very difficult at times.
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allets commented on: What Next? by allets 2 years 25 weeks ago
Good News Not Reported: Fighting war via publc opinion. We are good at agitprop. No column space for best calf 4-H girl.  
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allets commented on: The Complete Works Of Vladimir Lenin, Without Defect by J-C4113D 2 years 25 weeks ago
Stalin Was The Evil Russian: Vlad was out of the country when the revolution started. Killed Czar and fam then rebuilt an impoverished, starvng, and  sick  country. The aristocracy (like in France) changed, fled, or died. Stalin killed millions, up there with Adolf. Writings are poorly translated agitprop. Not evil (relgion banned anti-Capitalism). Stalin, like Putin, equal evil. Lenin had no resources. People starved from embargoes-Evil. What is history or theory is not truth but a record; an ultimate good. Some usa police trainng programs were using mein kampf as a text - that is evil. Lenin was a Bolshevik, like Mao's messages, rebuilding from scatch (taking control of thought) anti usa/anti Europe, thinking people of the world unite (under us). Sound familiar? Hiroshima, Nagaski, napalmed civvies in Nam - humans burned alive. Evil comes from ultmate power corrupted. . ~A~. 
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allets commented on: Humans of Earth by rachel 2 years 25 weeks ago
Multiple Outcomes Possible: A woman could have survived. He heard a few men scream and clutch babies or kids as jet plummeted. I judge folks by their character, but I AM odd. Guilt shapes personality, behavior, future decisions, i.e., not gonna fly again. Survivor syndrome thoroughly covered here. Nice portraits: Healthy/Strong vs. Guilty/Tragic.  . ~A~ . 
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allets commented on: Finally Spring by allets 2 years 25 weeks ago
You Are Welcome: Eyes stressed, keeping most replies short, postng less - and less. Jus fnishe re-reading Dragon Riders of Pern - 6 novels;marathon read. I wrote down @ 500 4-7 stllable words, mostly adverbs. May look up for alrernate denotations, abiut 10 root words I did not know. Mccaffrey's American-Irish. Died 2011.. Lady A . 
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Starward commented on: BETTER THINK TWICE by pamschwetz 2 years 25 weeks ago
I like how the whole poem: I like how the whole poem rotates through one rhyme scheme.
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Starward commented on: Freely Hidden by rachel 2 years 25 weeks ago
And I encourage you to write: And I encourage you to write one, or several.  I wish I had been able to read poems like yours during my adolescence, half a century ago.  I struggled with desires that were, then even more than now, deemed inappropriate; and what constituted beauty for me was not shared by most of my classmates and peers.  Therefore, I could not speak openly. I am certain---110%---that there are others like me on this site or elsewhere.  They need the encouragement of your poems to help them with their own struggles.                                                                                                                                                                                                                                    
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