PostPoems Be Artistic. Be Creative. Be Inspired!

Thank you.  I take that as: Thank you.  I take that as quite a compliment.  Before I became a poet, I had wanted to write science fiction stories, horror stories, and murder mysteries.  I guess some of that still lingers.  Thanks again for commenting, I really appreciate your words.

Many thanks Patricia. I am: Many thanks Patricia. I am glad of it and hoping for more poetic journeys down the road.

Thank you so much for the: Thank you so much for the glorious effort you have taken to carefully consider this work and 2 into two has been duly noted and affirmed. I have changed it  best blessings ss 

This is a tremendous: This is a tremendous testimony poem.  May I ask a couple of questions?

This poem is so cohesive, and: This poem is so cohesive, and so compact, that every line becomes my favorite as I read it, and then the next line affter that becomes my favorite while reading it, and so on right until the end.  This poem, remarkably, presents some very profound emotion without becoming pompous; and that final line grounds it in the very real situation that we all share---when the most intense emotions, desires and responses can be punctuated by the sound of snoring.  We are capable of highly spiritual aspirations, and yet we have the vulnerabilities of snoring, after-dinner indigestion, or stepping into dog poop while mowing the lawn.      The digit in the second line is a little bit of an eye-stumbler; and, in my opinion, should be replaced by the word "two" in order to keep the poem internally consistent.  I raise this issue only because the poem is so genuinely efficient in its effect that something as small as an eye-stumble should just be removed and replaced.  In a mediocre poem, such a thing would not matter at all; in an artistic poem, as this one is, it matters so much more.  I am not making a criticism, just a suggestion; the poem is too overwhelmingly beautiful to criticize.     And that tenth line---wow!  That is one of the most beautiful lines I have ever read---in any poem, at any time, anywhere.  Consisting of five words, it does not call attention to itself, and yet, like a tightly coiled spring, it releases tremendous power.  I have read the poem more than once just to get to that tenth line and feel the uncoiling of its power.     Although the breaths, in its title, may be uneven, the quality of the poem and the verbal skill it displays is entirely consistent from first to last syllable, a seamless piece in which every component contributes to the overall impact of its verbal beauty.    Thank you for sharing this magnificent poem with us.

Thank you very much for those: Thank you very much for those words.  I am glad and grateful that you visited the poem.