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Starward commented on: my lost world by Spinoza 1 year 41 weeks ago
First, I think this is one of: First, I think this is one of the most important poems I have read here in a long time.  So, if my comment becomes verbose, it is because of my immediate admiration of this poem. * The question that concludes the poem strikes me as rhetorical (in the best way) because the answer to the question is contained within the poem.  The lost world you are trying to recover is summoned by invocation and evocation into the poem, where your poetic words preserve it after the individual components have passed from the material world.  But, as great [oems do, you have spiritualized them in this poem, and therefore made them lasting.  We see this same process in Wallace Stevens' poems that reconnect with his ancestors after his geneaological studies; in Eliot's Four Quartets; and in Masters' Spoon River Anthology.  And it is not just the modernist poems that do this:  we have Vergil's nostalgia for the lost bucolic world in his first two collection of poetry and in glimpses scattered through The Aeneid; and in Dante's Divine Comedy which the Argentine poet, J. L. Borges, believed had been constructed for one, and only one, purpose---to summon Beatrice back into Dante's presence just one more time.  Citing these precedents establishes, I think, the way your poem fits into the Canon, and how it reminds us how to summon our own lost worlds back.  * The ancient Egyptians believed that the preservation of a person's name in records (which, for them, was mostly their massive monuments and elaborately inscribed tombs) that person was assured of immortality.  That is, by invoking them with a word, their names, they are given an eternal presence.  In the same way as they did, you---along with Stevens, Eliot, Vergil and Dante---show us how our lost worlds are only a word away, a word of evocation.  In my own life, two particular periods are the most precious to me, and have often seemed the most remote and unrecoverable (when I am at my weakest which, in old age, seems to be happening too often); and your poem has reminded me that these two periods are not lost to me, they are entirely recoverable as long as I put words to them, and put them into my words.  And for that reminder, and an example how to do so, I thank you most wholeheartedly and enthusiastically.  
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Starward commented on: Clinging To A Shrine I Could Only Imagine by J-C4113D 1 year 41 weeks ago
Thank you for this comment;: Thank you for this comment; my delay is no reflection of a lack of gratitude, just a reflection of my own incompetence during a (hopefully temporary) bad time. I found this poem a little difficult---hard to articulate the chaotic thoughts of a twelve year old.  I find that, despite my expectations, I am not much wiser about myself then as I thought it would be.  So this poem made me a little nervous, but your comment, your understanding of my intention, keeps this poem from being deleted.  I am very grateful for your comment; my delay in response is a reflection of my own incompetence right now, and not in any way a reflection of ingratitude or apathy.  I am, have been, and shall always be grateful for your words---whether in your magnificent Poems, or your always wise and encouraging comments.  You are a great Poet; your words, in whatever form they take, always---always---constitute an event.
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Spinoza commented on: the serpent by Spinoza 1 year 41 weeks ago
a glow of happiness to see you here:   There is an old Chinese expression…   "Better to be a dog in times of tranquillity, than a human in times of chaos."   How I wish it were so, to be that dog.   But here we are… in the deep dark, before the plunge.   So let us expend everything we have, to be the last embers of light.   And hour by hour, day by day… turn to God and pray for a miracle.   For it is a miracle we need… as the bow of the ship, slips below the waves.   ~/~    
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georgeschaefer commented on: Intro (Yearning) by Tortured_Poet 1 year 41 weeks ago
welcome back.  I look forward: welcome back.  I look forward to reading your work.
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Tortured_Poet commented on: MY DAD by chris 1 year 41 weeks ago
This is a unique poem,: This is a unique poem, describing your dad and his love for cars in a short but sweet style. Nice to see something different. Keep writing
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Tortured_Poet commented on: NACHOS FOR BREAKFAST by georgeschaefer 1 year 41 weeks ago
Funny!: This poem made me laugh lol. Sounds like a breakfast of champions to me 
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Tortured_Poet commented on: No Way Out by uninvited_1 1 year 41 weeks ago
Great write: Another great write and also relatable. Your expression of emotion is beautifully demonstrated in the work. 
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Tortured_Poet commented on: Heard Enough by uninvited_1 1 year 41 weeks ago
Very powerful write and sad.: Very powerful write and sad. I feel like this one can be relatable to so many different people, really well written.
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Tortured_Poet commented on: Crawl by uninvited_1 1 year 41 weeks ago
I like your style in this: I like your style in this piece, reminds me of a Linkin park song. Very cool
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Tortured_Poet commented on: Pain is a memory by SSmoothie 1 year 41 weeks ago
Woah this one seems like it: Woah this one seems like it could be a metal song or something, your choice of words and flow are inspiring. Great write!
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Tortured_Poet commented on: Tumble by SSmoothie 1 year 41 weeks ago
I like the style of this one: I like the style of this one and how descriptive you are with how you describe the experience and emotion. 
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Tortured_Poet commented on: A message for a friend by SSmoothie 1 year 41 weeks ago
Wow. I found this very: Wow. I found this very profound and expressive. Kind of felt like it could be a song. 
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crypticbard commented on: not all that glisters is gold by arqios 1 year 41 weeks ago
And regrowing is quite what: And regrowing is quite what we need at certain junctions of life. Thanks Pungus
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crypticbard commented on: not all that glisters is gold by arqios 1 year 41 weeks ago
Thank you Patricia. Your much: Thank you Patricia. Your much welcome comment is very encouraging.
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Starward commented on: Incarnation by LornaRJ 1 year 41 weeks ago
This is another excellent: This is another excellent summary of the Nativity events.  I would question, however, your statement that "It wasn;t well organized."  That directly contradicts the last line of the preceding stanza, and also implies a criticism of God's exact plan for accomplishing all this.  
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