A Hauki

 "

 

she said she loved me,
but that was a lie.
because today, she said goodbye.

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J-C4113D's picture

The form of Haiku is not

The form of Haiku is not easily written, but you have done a masterful work here, creating an entire implied backstory, and a profound depth of emotional agony, in 

three short lines.  Wow!


J-Called

word_man's picture

thank you for the visit,not

thank you for the visit,not really a hauki ,but close enough for me


ron parrish

SSmoothie's picture

Sleek! Nicely put together :)

Sleek! Nicely put together :)


Don't let any one shake your dream stars from your eyes, lest your soul Come away with them! -SS    

"Well, it's love, but not as we know it."

word_man's picture

thank you

thank you


ron parrish

bishu's picture

Yess

This was BANG on the nail !! No frills


©bishu 

 

word_man's picture

thank you mr bishu

thank you mr bishu


ron parrish

word_man's picture

i know this is not a real

i know this is not a real hauki,

but who cares,i like it


ron parrish

Beatnik1979's picture

Its

its only not real if it doesn't exist...

and this is a fine haiku...

perhaps the style shoud be the aptly named Parrish Haiku...

very clever indeed

word_man's picture

thank you, maybe it would

thank you, maybe it would


ron parrish

allets's picture

red shirt Haiku

hey, it's me :~s~


 

 

word_man's picture

lol,whos me ?

lol,whos me ?


ron parrish