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Back Off
Give me some room
I just need some time
You've got your life
This chaos is mine
Just back right off
And give me some space
I want to be alone
Just get out of my face
Keep your mouth shut
And don't speak to me
I've heard enough
Let me be me
It's too late to reach me
I'm already gone
Don't try to fight me
The battle's already won
DON'T F***IN TOUCH ME
I'm no longer yours
But you'll find some way
To blame her, of course
You've controlled me too long
Now it's time to let go
I want to live my life
And I won't take a "no"
Like a flower blooming
The inside is coming out
You're about to see me
See what I'm all about
12/19/01
You heep on venting. I feel you and I hear you.
"Give me some room I just need some time You've got your life This chaos is mine" this is an amazing way of puttin things. first it shows how you want to live yr life and not let someone live it for u, but it also shows that u want to LIVE it not live the good parts and let someone live the bad parts. well u get my drift. "Just back right off And give me some space I want to be alone Just get out of my face" and i can't rember how many times i've felt this way when my dad bugs me when i am pissy or upset. this is a great way of showin it. "Keep your mouth shut And don't speak to me I've heard enough Let me be me" yet again showin standing up for yrself and gettin mad, enough is enough and u want them to know that. great way of wording this, i love the line let me be me. the net part is kinda choppi, but i know what u mean to be sayin and the anger is still there so, its not bad. could use a little work just so it don't look bad compared to the rest of this poem. "DON'T F***IN TOUCH ME" couldn't have said it better myself! when parents or someone intrude and try to live yr life, the anger just gets bottled up then BANG don't fucken touch me. this could also be bout the person u r havin the problem with not just yr parents. but i'll critic this as if it were yr parents. and the rest of this part is ok but doesn't flow well with the yours-course. "You've controlled me too long Now it's time to let go I want to live my life And I won't take a "no" " this is the best, when parents won't let go of their kids, sometimes u have to stand up and say well i'm livin it my way and u can't say no coz i'm old enough to vote and young enought to scream(hehe yes i love that line, matt put it so well). and the ending is good because when kids grow up sometimes the mother and fther don't really see them they see what they think is them(and when the parents try to controll they see what they want to see) but this part shows how u don't care what they see, they r about to see the real u like it or not. yeah see i was nice here no dogs chewin papper apart!(smack upside the head, dogs chew paper apart my *ss) lol ash
Much Love
Ashley
I had no idea that you could write this way Rueben! Very deep. Your really good. Luv Nikki.
The emotion behind this one is there, a couple places make it seem as if you are talking to her but then you clear it up and you know it is about your parents...nicely done love ya always Vicki