(Rough Draft)
Tongue twisted,
and hand tied,
she knocked me off my feet,
at full running stride,
Never saw her coming,
but felt her getting closer all the time,
I loved her in whispers,
but like hot breath on a cold night,
the words lingered in the air,
that single silent moment,
her hand brushed aside a wild wisp of hair,
I found myself wishing what her hands would be like to hold,
and the very next second,
I was falling,
falling so fast it seemed like the sky was screaming
this is beautiful! I would
this is beautiful! I would leave it a falling. but having said that I cant wait to read the rest of this gorgeous piece!
Don't let any one shake your dream stars from your eyes, lest your soul Come away with them! -SS
"Well, it's love, but not as we know it."
Screaming Skies, Batman!
I loved the sky screaming as you fall, the line breaks are a puzzle. The S Skies is Surreal. Internal rhymes might help with the flow (I read it out loud) to capture your voice which is wonderful. Needs a title "Unfinished?" or Finishing Touch ~Lady A~
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