Her toes, freshly painted
with a dark
metallic toe-polish
She is perched in a window-jam, wrapped in a towel
high above
the bohemian neighborhood
A cigarette, curiously dangles
from her lip,
with a long vacant ash
Her smoking hand, is trembling
The other
is coiled, round a bottle of Jack
Smoke curls upward, and disappears
behind the curtain
One by one, a parade of tears
tumble across
her porcelain cheek
They tumble
down, like lonely troubadours
that have lost their way
She does not notice, that I’ve entered
the flat
She is already halfway, to the bottle's end
She is too exhausted
and too drunk, to notice anything
Her mind is perched somewhere
far away;
It is contemplating, dreaming of another world
It is a long hard day, for both of us
Her legs are neatly folded
beneath her chin;
She is using her oil-painted knees,
as a platform for thought
With a vacant look, she flicks
her ash,
from the window
She flicks it, on the world below
with a look
of loathing and disgust
In a corner of the room, there are
several
shredded canvases
They are strewn atop, an old
pizza box
full of dry crumbly crusts
Down in the world below,
a newspaper
scuttles across the street
She watches it, as it floats
away
down the avenue, like a lost balloon
Somewhere in the pages, are the words
of a little fat man;
He claims to know something
about her oil paintings
He said, "They were too melancholy"
But there was nothing melancholy
about them;
Only the little fat man himself, was melancholy
He was melancholy,
because he did not get something
that he wanted
Seeing the scene, as it was painted before me
I shook my keys,
to announce my presence
and then, stepped into the candle light
She wrapped herself around me
quivering,
as a new stream of tears began to flow
Do not despair, my sweet darling
Do not despair,
when the world does not meet you
on fair terms
For in truth, my sweetness – It meets no one that way
And whether you engage it, with your intellect
or not,
It meets us all the same
She tried to pull me, in another
direction
But standing on my shoes
barefoot,
I walked her back to the window-jam;
It was raining outside.
Lighting a cigarette - I picked up the bottle
and took
a long hard draw
And while I gathered her
against me,
I could feel the increased pace of her quivering
I took another pull - a big one
and I too,
flicked my ash
On the world below
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'Do not despairmy sweet
'Do not despair
my sweet darling
when the world does not
meet you
on fair terms;
For in truth, my sweetness
It meets
no one that way
And whether you engage it
with your intellect
or not;
It meets us all the same'
These two stanzas are pure genius
My mother was a rainbow
My father turned her grey
they loved me like a sky lantern
they watched me fly away
That is a fine and kind
That is a fine and kind compliment my friend. Thank you.
Loved it
Loved the story line. like diving into a novel.
But I read it to the end. Why
But I read it to the end. Why Compress it? Compress it for editing purposes but maybe take it to prose and write a short story. Ill viist this again and think on what you are saying
Maybe you're right. I think
Maybe you're right. I think you're right. Maybe it doesn't need compressing. I hack things apart sometimes from habit. It's not always a good habit. Sometimes I just need to hear a voice of reason in the wilderness.
I have been reading poetry
I have been reading poetry since the spring of 1973. Very, very few poets to "get" to me such that I have an emotional reaction that is beyond words to describe. (Stevens in the primary exception to that experience.) But now, you have gotten in there where few have gone before. I do not have sufficient words to describe the poignant beauty, and almost excruciating effect, this poem provides. This is beauty of a degree I do not normally find when I am browsing. I cannot get over this, at the moment. I am going to have to get up and get a drink of cold water, or go smoke a cigar, or somethng, i don't know, but this one has shaken me up in the very best way that says---borrwing William Windom's words in a Star Trek episode---"Pure poetry . . . absolutely pure!"
J-Called
A man can live for a long
A man can live for a long time on glowing commentary like that. This one has been in the works for a very long time, and sometimes it takes a very long time – because you need to study the fracture lines of a stone before cutting it, especially if it's a rare stone that you love.
Your stone metaphor is one of
Your stone metaphor is one of the most brilliant descriptions of writing a poem that I have ever read---and I am including, in that comparison, Vergil, Milton, Stevens, and Cunningham. I do not think any of them ever put it so succintly and precisely. I suspect that metaphor will be in the Quotation books someday.
J-Called
Loved this read and
Loved this read and especially your description of the girl and the reasons for her sadness and how she was coping... awesome imagery so real to me.
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...and he asked her, "do you write poetry? Because I feel as if I am the ink that flows from your quill."
"No", she replied, "but I have experienced it. "