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I lay at your core

let your petals embrace me

I moan above your thorns


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last updated 12 October 2010 - 1:26am
©21 December 2002 - 1:46am — raila
2 March 2005 - 7:21am — poetvg
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beautiful piece

14 February 2003 - 1:06am — Dana Jewel Harris (not verified)
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Wow, that's pretty sexy

14 February 2003 - 1:04am — misty lackey (not verified)
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this is a nice piece of work, well done lovely!

29 December 2002 - 7:35am — strawberrylagoon (not verified)
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Beautiful

25 December 2002 - 7:23am — ultimprv
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Mmmm, Mmmmm, Mmm
I truly feel you on this
does it not look like a rose
and how sweet it is
thorns and all - smile

Much Respect, One Love

23 December 2002 - 11:36am — Nicole Bingham (not verified)
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compelling imagery. very nice. i especially like the twist at the end, a drastic contrast to the image of the rose/romance/love/softness/sensuality, etc.

31 December 2002 - 6:59am — Netta Jack (not verified)
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You know I love roses and I love this piece.

4 February 2003 - 7:49pm — Ernest Bevans (not verified)
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What I dig about your Senryu's is that they are universal.
Here again is another I can relate to - Often I have
expressed like sentiments to my wife, except not as
eloquently or as simply as your Haiku.
Keep writing - Keep the faith.