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Used to be
When i sad
you were there
when i felt bad
you were there
when i was angry
you were there
when i was happy
you were there
You shared my fears
my thoughts,my tears
today we fought, that was a shame
we both went through that horrible pain
this time i am naot the one to blame
This time you were not
there for me when i felt pain
when you tore that hole into my heart
you hurt me,what?You think this is a game?
the time will come when you will think
i hope your heart will tear apart
just like mine did
i hope one day you will regret what you have done
i hope no one hurts me like you did
now its time for me to move on
its time for us to go our seperate ways
although i'll never forget what we used to be
we had so much fun in so many ways
now my life has a better future
without you ahead of me.
so long, love always
Nekita
HEY! it's me again. I'm not sure when you wrote this poem but it seems new. I love the starting how you sorta do question then answer thing and through the rest i was like hehe this girl had a bad relationship and now she wants to get him back by maybe throwing a pie in his face and then the ending made that whole image go away and a whole new one came, a girl was hurt and cried but got over the guy (in a nice way)and has now said good by. i liked how i got two mental pictueres through that poem. i think for my critique i would probably say like try to only create one mental picture and don't do that little question answer thing and then go into a heart felt type poem but i'm actually going to say to leave it. it seems unorganized but it's also perfect that way. don't mess with it because it could end out bad. P.S. good for you for getting over that guy. *Nekita is such a pretty name*