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August 2003 Poetry

Slowly... oh so slowly,

wasting... wasting away.

Deteriorating... into nothing.

My heart... corroding.

My soul... dissolving.

Slowly... oh so slowly,

wasting... wasting away.

Gone... gone... gone...

gone... away.



~*~ Jill ~*~

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I wrote this on 8-13-03

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©14 August 2003 - 10:00am — hccgirl04
22 August 2004 - 2:14am — tonitails
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your display of feling was very well thought out and written in this poem...

20 August 2004 - 6:02pm — Opposite Sides (not verified)
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hi i likethis pem and the wai is formed because that gives it some of the emotin also. good work, thanks

20 August 2004 - 3:25pm — Shelomith Reuben (not verified)
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Hi Jill-
This poem I find both very simple and effective. I feel like I understand totally where you were through your words. Wistful, sad...
Well done and not overdone!

20 August 2004 - 3:31pm — djtj
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I even felt the need to read it slowly as if wasting away. Little poems like this make words a joy. Just the way they are set up...very nice
Debbie