Slowly... oh so slowly, wasting... wasting away. Deteriorating... into nothing. My heart... corroding. My soul... dissolving. Slowly... oh so slowly, wasting... wasting away. Gone... gone... gone... gone... away. ~*~ Jill ~*~
I wrote this on 8-13-03
your display of feling was very well thought out and written in this poem...
hi i likethis pem and the wai is formed because that gives it some of the emotin also. good work, thanks
Hi Jill- This poem I find both very simple and effective. I feel like I understand totally where you were through your words. Wistful, sad... Well done and not overdone!
I even felt the need to read it slowly as if wasting away. Little poems like this make words a joy. Just the way they are set up...very nice Debbie
your display of feling was very well thought out and written in this poem...
hi i likethis pem and the wai is formed because that gives it some of the emotin also. good work, thanks
Hi Jill-
This poem I find both very simple and effective. I feel like I understand totally where you were through your words. Wistful, sad...
Well done and not overdone!
I even felt the need to read it slowly as if wasting away. Little poems like this make words a joy. Just the way they are set up...very nice
Debbie