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You Didn't See
You didn’t see me smiling,
The day you walked away
You didn’t see me laughing
When you said you’d never stay
You didn’t see me jump for joy
When you said you felt no love
You barely saw me smiling
When you were brought down from ‘above’
I didn’t see your scheming
Didn’t know what you had planned
Didn’t know that you were lying
When you took me by the hand
You didn’t feel the absence
Of those three words from the start
But I know that they didn’t leave your lips
‘Cause they were never in your heart
You say you never saw the hurt
With which you poisoned me
But all the while, we both knew
We were never meant to be.
Fab poem terri, reminds me of a song by avril lavigne called 'don't give a damn' well just the 1st verse wich is the only reason i like the song! i shall have to show you the lyrics
I can't believe I didn't already critique this poem. It's an amazing write. It has depth, evoked emotions, passion, fury, and talent. This is in my opinion one of your best pieces. Keep writing and sending them to me. Love you as a friend, Karyn
Terri,
This is a beautiful piece of writing.
The heartache is evident,yet you show your strength and understanding so clearly by accknowledging the fact he never really knew what love was.Or what he was missing in your love.
Danniel
This is all too familiar too. You express your pangs very well.
This is so sad yet so beautiful.
Steph Taylor
This poem really shows the pain you were feeling and how much it hurt. Great Job!
amazing. ithink your poems are EXCELLENT!