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Casual Victim,

    Cause not Me.

For I Shall Wait,

    As Weight Shall Be.


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Something to do with a 92 ft trajectory to be landed outside the express post box by a speeding car and at times wishing the very hell of previous lives to consume the villain. In short.

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last updated 12 October 2010 - 12:24am
©19 December 2001 - 11:06pm — pluguan
20 December 2001 - 11:06pm — Rachelle Wiegand (not verified)
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Hiya, Rich! I think I have mentioned this idea or thought previously, but this piece makes me think of it again. We, the reader do not understand the four small stanza's you have written, especially without the comments posted. Why not turn your comments into poetic verse, and add to the poem? The explanation is much longer than the poem itself. (scratches head)? It doesn't tell a complete or even partial story on it's own. Very well-written verbally, but it just lacks that appeal for the reader of knowing remotely what is going on. Again, what the hell do I know?