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PRESSURE OF ACHIEVING!
PRESSURE OF ACHIEVING!
The urge to achieve is too much on me, of late;
It’s quite inconceivable as it’s too late to come on me;
An array of hope, though I find in the farthest corner of mind,
Nevertheless, enforcing it becomes too much of a worry.
There’re certain constraints that make it insignificant;
As spontaneous thoughts get decimated for want of words;
The age is one that barricades my extra sensory perception;
And so, very often I land up achieving nothing.
Many a thought makes brain traffic congestion;
When too many thoughts embark on mind,
How to make them coherent, I just don’t know,
To make others glance and relish without a fuss.
The appetite to achieve induces my spirit;
Though the spirit is willing, the mind is lagging;
How much and how far, I got to go and achieve,
Makes it all the more ambiguous and lets me down.
Oh! There’s something that has dawned on me, I reckon;
Never, ever write for self-glory, but for your satisfaction;
‘Coz writing for others compels you to go on an extra mile,
And that’s what the pressure of achieving and falling, of course is!
Let creative writing let go off your mental pressure,
And the pressures of life that accumulate on course;
Use expressive verses to let go off your emotions;
To find a vent to express your unstable notions!
Yes. It is something like a
Yes. It is something like a burp or a release of flatus... lol. Or like vomiting. Getting out the noxious toxin. (?) Oh my goodnesd. You say it much better... lol.
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...and he asked her, "do you write poetry? Because I feel as if I am the ink that flows from your quill."
"No", she replied, "but I have experienced it. "
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Nightlight,
Your comment makes me understand that we got to get the unwanted things out as quickly as possible. But, at times, it neither comes out nor stays inside; it gets stuck in between. I mean, what we like to get out of mind and express, we are unable to as per context but still we persist on it ending up on the wrong side. I still don't know how far I have succeeded in that! Thanks anyway.
Ben
That has happened to me on
That has happened to me on occasion. Like when you already know that your words are worthless when expelled in the company of certain person or persons because of preconceived notions, so you rearrange them and seek new ways of expression in the hopes of feeling understood, (or getting the results you seek....), instead of just burping and accepting that the burp is natural.
There will always be someone who is offended by the burp. There will always be those who think negatively. There will always be those who look down at others with disdain. Accepting this and expressing yoursel anyway is not only part of learning to write...it is part of learning to live? Is that what you are touching on here? I do believe it is true, that what others say, do, think...is not about me. It is about them. How others respond is all about them. And i agree so much!! Never write for others!!! Write for you!!!!
Ben...i also meant to say, congratulations on making top ten. I said to myself, "it's about time!! Ben is such a good writer, and more importantly, i have actually witnessed you have grown so much as a writer as well!!!"
Blessings,
Liz. ♡♥♡
...and he asked her, "do you write poetry? Because I feel as if I am the ink that flows from your quill."
"No", she replied, "but I have experienced it. "
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Nightlight,
If at all you think I have achieved something, the credit goes to you as well as a few others for I always valued your comments and took them on merrit and even tried to correct myself. Thanks a lot for your inspirational comments, corrections and directions when I erred at times. Looking forward to see more of your comments and criticisms without which I willl lose direction.
Ben
Very precise way of putting
Very precise way of putting it, Ben. Sometimes, I do that same exact thing. Then... I try to just get off my own back and just allow whatever to flow. Without thought.
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Hi, Oh Healy!
Your comment is like a healing touch on an aching soul. Your comment, though precise, is quite expressive. I find the openness in you to reaveal what you got inside. Fine. I always consider the ones who keep commenting the works of others as people who are extraordinary and inspirational. Thanks.
Ben
AWE! Thanks Ben! I do my best
AWE! Thanks Ben! I do my best to remain open and free. Wish I could do more commenting than I'm able but I'm so glad to still get to read..... other minds inspire the heck out of me. :)
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Me dont even hab da pashence for poofreedin
Me dont even hab da pashence for poofreedin.Todaz two poss wiz riten beree phast ............ no edit.. who cares?? At leest I dont. Most craps on dis site goes to my portfolio. So many true poets habb stopped reading mah posts fopr obvious reezons.... Az long az ma breen funkshuns and mah fingars are okee I rite on dis site and simulate reeders.......... rite more n more garbage stinkee off da bin .... BTW Ben iz a fine akomplished writer in mah opeeneon.
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As I used to say, 'You are too generous in your comments'. This is a trait only few people have; and you stand so tall among those. Thanks Mr. Bishu.
Ben
I don't have patience for
I don't have patience for editing either. I could be a lot better at this writing stuff. Lol
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Dats about Dat
Dats about Dat
Poems at da
Drop of a Hat
Lill bit of chitchat
Dat'll shed all fat
LOL
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