when we lay
do I clear the anger away?
or does it just sway
right in your face, right in your way?
you thought back to the virgin day
when the darkness was still at bay
when he was still around to play
before the hells took your brother away
i see it in your look of betray
you breakaway
thinking of how your mother faded away
and your father hit the highway
leaving you in disarray
i hope for your sake you'll be okay.
It nice put as the order of
It nice put as the order of the poem....
But try some without the rhyme....
Break the veil of rhyme...
Go madder than your words think of your madness...
Conjure their real essence.....
Try!
P.s : It is just an opinion.... Keep going ....